Dream High

A poem to regain lost strength...

Far beyond the fairy meadows

And far above the mighty skies

My dreams go beyond this world

Even Stars can’t reach that high

Deep below the mighty oceans

And deep down the cold waters

where there is no light,

My passion goes beyond this all

Where even fishes can’t survive

My dreams, my passion; they make me go on

Failures and back gears- they don’t matter from now on

 

Author's Note

Reviews are most welcome...

Reviews

[¿]

And the dreams coming alive needs love and care to nurture so that they never go false again.........
These are truly high dream scenario! Great read😊

[Rahul]

this's what everyone should learn about life and its norms. very inspirational work you write in guise of such philosophical but so true slabs of poetry. nice work here. liked reading your stuffs!

[Noor.92]

My Pleasure ! :)

[khalid93]

this poem shows a great deal of optimism and positiveness and that's a nice thing.well done.

[Noor.92]

thanks a lot khalid93..!

[Hímayun kuræshýe]

You actually show through this poem that one's dreams cannot be limited or caged, they go far beyond boundaries. really nice thank you

[Noor.92]

Thank you..nice to hear that from you :)

[Samuel Dickens]

This is a positive and lovely poem about you and your dreams. A great example, too, of how the flourishes of mind can go to unknown places and create wondrous things. The world's workings are often a mystery, but a dreamer may find answers.

[Noor.92]

Thankyou Samuel.. I am happy that you liked this piece..:-)

[R Smith]

I like this a lot, great writing my friend :)

[Noor.92]

Thanks a lot Richard..:-)

[DaughterNature]

I think I see where you're going with this poem, but I also know that it could be a lot better. Please know: I am in NO WAY trying to downplay or disregard your poem. It's just that lots of people write poems about this subject, so if you're going to write one, make sure it's different from all the others, and make sure it's strong.

The strongest, most unique image you have here is "back gears" - I really like that. Make the rest of the poem like that! Phrases like "fairy meadows" and "mighty skies" are vague, meaning they float through the reader's mind without taking hold or making an impact.

I would also say that, if you're going to follow a form like you did in the first stanza, carry the form through the rest of the poem. It's very distracting for a reader's mind if I'm set to read with this particular rhythmic pattern, and then all of a sudden the poem stops moving in that rhythm.

Cheers!

[Noor.92]

I really appreciate your sincere remarks my friend but sometimes a person just yearn to write something in a vague and dazed manner..rather than thinking about its impression on others, I just pour my present state of mind in words.. Free of any second thoughts.. This makes me feel lighter..:-)