Killer

My first shot at senryu inspired by my friends.

I am a killer,
I shot him twice and then uncovered his face,
I saw myself.

© Nothing Personal. November 11, 2010.

Reviews

[Stef Outsiders]

Wow, so simple yet so brilliantly good!

[Tayler]

Very thought provoking, I read this multiple times. Short and seeminly simple but I like that you've created something that one can sit back and really think about.

[QC]

Again, this makes me think. Loved it all, though it was very short (: makes up a story in my mind. Magnificent!

[Moonflower]

This was like a nightmare, a flash of grim, hazy revolutions. Very good. ;)

[Just Cat]

A very short but thought provoking piece.
It could be seen as a reflection on society, killing itself.
Hmm, interesting.

[MuSe Ampoule]

Great departure from your typical format, though not a senryu...only in format as Cyan said...context was correct.

Beautiful analysis and thought provoking...shot him to find it was myself...excellent!

[Forgotten]

wow nothing like your other peices, can i ask is this wat your saying "you are the killer, but through all these murders all your really doing is killing yourself?" plz email me =D fantastic write

[Alice.Valkyrie]

wow, very dark, and so true!

[Dushyant Thadani]

Wow!! The ending was just appalling, and strikingly dark. But yes, the moral in this poem is really important, and if the world understands it, it could be the end of violence.

[Narcissa]

Wow. That's great! So much was said in so few words.