Delicately Rotting

Pretty much just came up with this at a time when I wasn't feeling great. Sometimes I do feel as if I am dead inside.

There's nothing special in the air

Nothing clean moves my strands of hair

No illumination will light up my skin, now

I feel dirty.

My blank eyes, without color

My heart, without a heartbeat

I am dead inside, you see?

There is no happiness in death.

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

Such a haunting tone floods the shadows in your reflections... and how I have seen myself in this mirror... the lonely pain that blinds and strips away all joy... So powerfully voiced, dear poet.

[NymphetamineDame]

Thank you very much, sir.

[Ban Heo]

I feel like the 2nd stanza is a bit weak compared to your first one. I would recommend changing "my heart, without a hearbeat" to something like "my heart with beat" it's more condensed

[soliloquy]

I love the chosen photo for this one....very perfect.

Very intense!! A little creepy.

[Rob Santana]

I like the last line,Your pic for this poem is bad a*s!! You look sinister,nice..

[NymphetamineDame]

Thank you, I do enjoy my white contacts.

[Patrick Henry]

I think it's pretty!! It's revealing, but also see it as temporary, too. You go back and forth with questions, sulking, and descriptions of yourself that plead for imagination.... and I love it!! I thought it was going to be dark or "grossly raw" like my poem: My Morbid Mentor. xoxo -Mark

[NymphetamineDame]

Oh no, this is definitely not dark. It's simple though. But thank you sir, I will have to check out your poem.

[Patrick Henry]

I wouldn't do that. lol At least not THAT one first!! It IS dark...... xoxo -Mark

[NymphetamineDame]

I like the dark.

[Patrick Henry]

There's about 8 kinda dark, 5 real "nasties", and about 35 dark/Gothic/fantasy ones..... It's a big list overall. Next time I come on here, if you'd like a list to find the names easier, tell me what kind of genre' you are looking to read. There's 2220 poems of mine on here that I wrote this year!! xoxo -Mark

[NymphetamineDame]

I do really enjoy dark/Gothic/fantasy, but I enjoy dark things. I mostly write horror after-all because I find it very easy to create something unnerving and disturbing.