Fading Dreams

Dream

Wanting no regrets he leans forward,
Eyes closed he feels nothing but air.
He opens his eyes and sees nothing,
Because she was never there

Reviews

[Shy Girl]

OH MY!!! To have the feeling....sense of...hope for...want so much...try it... only to have it be non-coporeal. Just the let down alone from getting the courage..my goodness such a powerful piece even with such a short set of lines. Makes one reflect upon our own desires of hope (not just a kiss either) wanting more from whatever it is you dream of for yourself. The regret though if one doesn't try to move forward...pain of dreams collapsing... It just says so much more than what is there to read. :)

[MOON]

This is so descriptive, sad the loss made even harder by the realisation she was never yours.short powerful write.

[Xx_Mizfit_xX]

Best imagery I've ever seen in ONLY FOUR LINES! Awesome!

[Sophie]

this is amazing! I really love this! It seems sort of like a ghost story. Great poem. I love how you mention another person one and in the last stanza, leaving the story to the reader's imagination. It's a mystery ghost story haha.

[Wild Willow Blue]

Wow. This is so powerful, just these four lines. I love how it starts not stating what exactly is going on. It's really sad, as well. Great job!

[Wolfhilde]

Very well written. You tell a story with only four lines. I love this!

[Crifa]

Best four liner i have seen yet. How did you put so much meaning in just a mere four lines? Easily one of my favorite. You're an amazing writer and don't let anyone tell you different.