Sam

Normally, I try to avoid poetry concerning another individual, but you feel what you're feeling, I suppose.

My amorous bleating

Proves fruitless

As you clasp your ears

In overt resistance.

 

Enraged and infatuated

Is a precarious pair,

And my belly is raw

From its manifestation.

 

What are you

But representative?

A fervent symbology

Of attachment

And abandonment.

 

Enamored and ill

With misplaced affection,

The inquisitive eye

Turns inward

To expose the common denominator.

Author's Note

Is it too tired a subject?

Reviews

[Rasputin]

Too tired a subject... not necessarily, as long as you can bring new aspects of said subject to light. Virtually every idea has already been explored ("Simpsons did it!"). What matters is whether or not you can make the reader see the topic from a new angle, so to speak. I think you accomplished that with this piece- it was clever, emotional; even funny, in a sardonic kind of way.
Two things I'd like to point out- when you chose the word "symbology", did you mean "symbol", or "symbolism"? Symbology is the study of symbols, not a symbol itself. Also, I'm not sure I understand the "common denominator" line. I understand the concept of a common denominator; I just don't understand its relationship to the rest of the piece.
All in all, though, I think you did well with this. Even I enjoyed it, and poetry that deals with love isn't usually my cup of tea.

[Chris]

I kinda liked it...