Her Last Breath

This goes with He Closed His Eyes by a schizophrenic writer

They broke apart

It broke her heart

But she held her head high

Didn't let him see her cry

Deep inside she hurt

No feeling could be worse

She loaded the gun

Had no where to run

With her last breath

With all she had left

She whispered "I still love him"

Author's Note

this isnt a suicide thing so dont get crazy just soe writing thats all

Reviews

[cycy]

i love the way you and a schizophrenic writer wrote 2 poems that complement each other, i really enjoyed the 2 perspectives for the guy and the girl. your poem is beautiful though sad. i really enjoyed both of them so much and it kinda gave it that romeo and juliet feel, with the death angle and how they both still loved each other. powerful poem hey, well written. thumbs up :)

[a schizophrenic writer]

I thought the combination of the writing styles complemented each other very nicely. (The duet idea was all his!)

[Average person]

hers* Im a girl :P and thank you I just wanted to see how it'd turn out and i was pleasantly surprised. Thank you again :)

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...You are creative...:)...........................

[a schizophrenic writer]

This is great! I couldn't ask for anything better to go with my writings! Great idea making the girls perspective. I'll promote this in the description of mine!

[Average person]

Thanks :) I wasn't sure how well it'd work out. so glad you like it!

[a schizophrenic writer]

it came out great! Good idea!

[Average person]

do you know this hanna girl that reviewed me?? i have no idea whats going on..

[a schizophrenic writer]

she reviewed one of mine too. I just blocked her and deleted her reviews. I don't know what it's all about.

[Average person]

okay just making sure.. i was so confused i was near tears. thanks..

[a schizophrenic writer]

yeah. she did the same to one of my poems, I was about to cry :P