Papercut my brain..

You've got me as a voodoo doll 

You pierce me with a pin 

Ever so often 

You know

Where it hurts the most 

You go for it again and again 

Without a thought 

I don't bleed 

'Cos the wounds are internal 

The wounds are raw 

You never give it a chance to heal 

You pin me before I could feel 

The pain is the outcome by default 

Sometimes I feel 

You run through my heart 

With a sharp dagger 

And

Paper cut my brain 

So that I am left to think and feel 

In utter disorder..

 

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Ouch, what cutting metaphors you've conjured up here Tink. This one bleeds out on your page....have missed you, where ya been girl?

[PP]

Hi honey how are you? Long time.. I have been busy with life which is giving me hard time at the moment apart from that have a lovely new year :) x

[David Scott]

A paper cut to the brain is worse than a dagger to the heart.
I think you wrote a fresh poem with dramatic flare blended perfectly into reflective thought.

[MAC]

how very unique. just love this write! you dear are creative

[Neville]

In my opinion & whilst I am no expert, there being many who are more qualified to make profound statements and to dissect this poem than I.

This was a delight to discover and to explore. My only, issue & this is not meant to be a criticism at all but rather just a personal thing,

I have always had a problem with the abbreviation of' because' into 'cos' & when you used the Cos) shortened version here, I got just a little bit distracted. In spite of this and I am sure many will skirt over or disagree, I reckon this to be a great 21st century poem.... N

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You express those deep feelings inside of one caused by the metaphorical cuts other people inflict. The metaphors you use feel accurate.

[Sami Khalil]

The analogy was wonderful. You have described helplessness in a marvelous way...Thank you for sharing...:)...................

[PP]

Thank you Sami, you have wonderfully felt the poem :)

[Sami Khalil]

I did...You are welcome...:)..................

[PP]

:):):):).....:)

[Sami Khalil]

:)........................

[Vikrantsingh]

Ah! that was touchy. Heartfelt like this is happening to me as you fail in love and try to figure out what went wrong and we keep bothering self and harassment encroachment which leads you fall on your knee.
I felt the supressment which can't be felt without broken heart or disturbed person who is willing to overcome his/her past.
I went way intense dear. This happened to people way ofttimes. Just don't keep any hopes live your life as you master your own destiny.

Simplifying my thought and loved your way of expressions
Thanks again for such a wonderful share.

Kind Regards,
Vikrantsingh Parmar

P.S : 1st poem i'm rating 99/100

[PP]

You're ever so kind Vikrant :)

It is the feeling of helplessness that is so raw, powerful and intense, in my opinion is the greatest hurt anyone can cause to someone else. I am so amazed how you felt this experience through my words..It is an honour to read your reviews :)

[Vikrantsingh]

You're welcome dear :)

[PP]

:)

[Steven]

The people we let in... And sometimes have to--like family. Life.

[PP]

True that is; life eh?

[Coyote Poetry]

A very interesting poem. In my lifetime. I have upset woman. I believe they bought a voodoo doll and tried to make me suffer. I enjoyed the description. Sometime the wounds are hidden and done in secret. A entertaining poem to read. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[PP]

Thank you so much Coyote...We have all upset people in our lifetime but the worst cuts are from those who still constitute an important part of the life! Thank you once again for the review :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

If we are constantly feed negative thoughts it will eventually get to us... it seems it is easier to believe the bad rather then good... those who do it are really just trying to control you and make themselves feel better.

[PP]

It is slightly difficult Dale when surrounded by so much negativity all around...moments of blue :( But I am a Ninja Fighter..I will get a grip soon ::) Thank you Dale..I will search for the good in bad, only because you've asked me to!