Anxious wreckage..

Pythonic maliciousness of distrust 

Gulps peace of mind: 

Piece by piece..

Churns thoughts in every direction 

Leaving no traces 

                                .....for the sake of feeling.. 

Angry vision of brokenness 

The viewer intends to see:

Through smoky kaleidoscope of the heart 

At its rotten glory..

Gluey emotions that stink, 

With who knows what poison..?:

Form rapids of turmoil in venomous veins..

Spilling disorder in pure vanity..

May be the beholder likes to enjoy: 

Creepiest feeling of anxiety

and the wreckage it brings along..

   

Reviews

[DrD]

The debris of the past can contaminate the best of us. You mastered this concept brilliantly and I enjoyed every word of it. Very well done!

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

wow, had to get the old dictionary out here...

superb metaphor with trust etc

:D

[PP]

hahahaha...it ain't that full of bombastic words after all! Thank you for the review though :)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

lol, u making me feel illiterate :P
and you are welcome always :D

[PP]

hahahaha....how dare I???

[Dr. Wood ?]

well I could never do this...quite brilliantly portrayed....Trust in ones life is paramount and if that boat sinks..the waters can be cold and so deep

[Frieda P]

I trust, or mistrust as this poem screams at the top of it's lungs, that'll you return the favor and I may use your poetry as you've mine, and we can both shout these injustices!! Well done Tink!

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, the alliteration of words like venomous veins, and phythonic as a adjective is really brillant, and a good idea to combine emotions with a wrecked ship..you got this right..

[Pete Langley]

The turmoil caused by the loss of trust is the storm that sinks the ship....you encompass the feelings very well, Prathama. P.

[PP]

Thank you Pete..."The turmoil caused by the loss of trust is the storm that sinks the ship...." so well said :)

[B-poet]

Vivid imagery and piercing diction that brings the theme at hand to life in a formidable fashion. Great work. Love the picture of the titanic's watery grave. It correlates with the title very well. :)

[PP]

Thank you Bpoet..the picture of Titanic means a lot - It is probably a masterpiece of 'Love Wreckage'..:)

[Rita L. Sev]

Excellent word choices in this piece - Pythonic maliciousness of distrust - smoky kaleidoscope of the heart - rapids of turmoil in venomous veins...

Anxiety always leads to wreckage - this is s great poem that conveys your meaning well!

[PP]

Thank you Rita for this awesome review:)

[Jack...]

I'm with Jacob on this one, anxiety and distrust make everything hard to deal with, especially when it hits when you least expect it. Nice one my friend.

[PP]

Thank you Jacob, unexpected anxiety is the worse indeed :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the title really caught my attention, the poem held to the end.

there is such venom in this...anxiety and distrust make life so hard to live...we become wreckage because of it.

well said.

jacob

[PP]

Thank you Jacob, always something to learn from your reviews :)