Blue Sand..Saffron Sea..

 I sat by the saffron sea

Its reflection hit my eyes 

As I soaked 

more and more 

of the velvet sunlight 

So purple that its flash 

melted the blue sand 

The golden leaves of a

distant maroon tree 

Flew by my me

I sat there eagerly waiting 

for the white night sky 

In my hollow body..  

 

Reviews

[Sky B]

I really loved the imagery. I think that the part saying "so purple that its flash..." is a bit awkward, but just that little snipped bit. Overall really nice us of colors to create a space for the reader to inhabit.

[Vikrantsingh]

Great work Prathama :) loved it really amazing read and write ;)
Thanks for the invite :)
- Singh :)

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Beautiful image. Splendid read and write...as always:)

[PP]

Thank you Brandon, I am happy you enjoyed it :)

[Sugar Plum ♥]

beautiful poem, dear...I loved the image of the see, great flow and so deep meaning of words...like written on the sand,..I like the end so much!
I sat there eagerly waiting
for the white night sky
In my hollow body..

-nour-
June-013

[PP]

Thank you ever so much Nour, I believe the white night sky has made an impression then ? :) Glad you liked it :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. Good description create good vision and thoughts. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[PP]

Always a pleasure to read your review comments Coyote, thank you for passing by :)

[prashant harsh]

i love these kinds poems, scenes we imagine in our mind :) well written

[PP]

Thank you Prashant :)

[khalid]

very sweet image of the sea...i felt im on the shore..

[PP]

Have you soaked enough velvet sunlight Khalid? :)

[khalid]

sure i have..

[PP]

:)

[Frieda P]

Love the imagery in this, bittersweet to the senses, lovely to read Tink!

[PP]

Frieda darling thank you for your words xx

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I felt a spiritual awakening in your words.. a stunning little poem.

[PP]

Hi Dale, thank you for feeling the poem just the way it should have been felt!!! You have a sharp vision must say :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much for the compliment. It was a pleasure to read.

[PP]

The pleasure is mine too Dale :)

[KeelyJane]

Beautiful imagery in this one. Loved loved loved your word selection. Excellent poem.

[PP]

Thank you so much Keely...I am much happy you loved this poem :)