Alone

Horror Story in twelve words or less. (:

Twisted, mutilated fingers trace your skin. 

...At least you're not alone .

Anymore. (:

Reviews

[Amory Grey]

That gave me the chills, but only one suggestion *you're*
I know, I'm sorry... I'm one of those people.

[Dhanadeepa Dixit]

Haha! Good catch Amory! I'm surprised nobody else on here caught it, or myself for that matter. You have a sharp eye (;

And thank you for pointing that out! We all need a few grammar Nazis to keep this sight clean. (; Thanks!

[Amory Grey]

Haha thank you, and no problem.
Here's my revision: "... trace your skin." And "...you're not alone."
I do like the image you are portraying, I never imagined that just 12 worlds could give me a fright.
Cheers :)

[B]

Short but so full of messages
and a most definite a horror

Loving the Halloween feel taking over WC

[Lavorther]

Nice, i didn't need to sleep tonight anyway ;)

I don't know why, but that smiley at the end makes it even more scary. Good job.

[Dhanadeepa Dixit]

Thank you Lavorther!!! I'm glad you noticed the intended effect the smiley had. (:

[Briana]

I'm going to go ahead and assume the previous reviewer saw a different version. This was well done!

[Dhanadeepa Dixit]

Thank you Brianna! I think he didn't know that this had to be a twelve word story for the contest. And you did an excellent job yourself!

[Briana]

Wait, re-reading his review made it more clear. He was suggesting that you replace the word "skin" with one of the three words he offered up.

[Josef Hadz]

I like it as is, but I substituted "cheek", "neck", and "ear" for "skin"; and could feel it just a tad more. Perhaps I'm too sensitive and will shudder when the tiny hairs on the back of my ear are touched.

[Dhanadeepa Dixit]

yea, I agree that those substitutions could have made this story a little scarier. However it was written to be a contestant for "12-word horror story contest". So I can only switch skin for one of your suggestions (or else cut something else) . If so, which one would you recommend?