Regret

This is an assignment for school. Review please :)

I look out through the greens

I try to find things

Things that make me forget you

That make me forget why I'm blue

Things that cheer me up

Things that won't let me give up

 

So what I did I do to forget

To forget I'm upset?

I didn't forget.

And I do regret

I regret meeting you,

I regret leaving you

But I know everything will still be strange

Because you won't ever change

 

Sure you were sweet

You were a great athlete

You may appear to gentle

But you're not even helpful

You broke my heart

And now we're always be apart

 

So what I did I do to forget

To forget I'm upset?

I didn't forget.

And I do regret

I regret meeting you,

I regret leaving you

But I know everything will still be strange

Because you won't ever change

 

 

Reviews

[Radad Ibn Nasir]

This is a common ground between yourself and the emotions that come with it. Great piece. And your repition clearly shows that you are inbetween regret and forget and it would be weird to not have any of those... and soo this is what makes us human. bravo senorita bravo

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I could see this as song, it has flow and rhyme. Very well written, i enjoyed this lyrical piece.

[Steve]

WEll done....it sounds like lyrics.

[Blossom]

its really nice.. nice flow and meaning to it.

[Alex]

this is actually a song. kinda..