Expectation

Spring is the season of rebirth! May hope find its place on everyone's heart...

I wait for you

like the dark waits for the light in dawn

and the mountains for the snow in winter.

And inside my heart

lies a barren land seeking for water.

Bees return again to the lilac trees

and fly in circles above my dream

while Hope finds the way to my yard

attached on a sparrow’s tail.

And as I’m expecting you to come

a caterpillar inside me waits its turn to become a butterfly…

Reviews

[Neon]

A wonderful touching piece that's well linked up with the life.. with the sky.. with the air and of course to the heart. A beautiful piece that makes a reader refresh.

[Chrys_Pap]

I'm really glad you like it! Thanks for reviewing :)

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Love your conncetion to nature that flows and grows within and the imagery is beautiful. Splendid read and write.

[Chrys_Pap]

Thank you very much! I'm glad you like it.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

You are welcome.

[Friday]

Wonderful piece with a final line that seems very original to me. "in dawn" instead of "by/of dawn" (for example) is very interesting. Thank you.

[Chrys_Pap]

Thank you for reading and reviewing!

[Rahul]

It's a great "EXPECTION", i love this write,
I wait for you
like the dark waits for the light in dawn
and the mountains for the snow in winter.

great lines.

[Chrys_Pap]

thank you :)

[SyberRose]

I enjoyed your lovely words... especially the butterfly ending...SyberRose

[Chrys_Pap]

thank you for reading and reviewing :)

[Wórdsmíth]

wonderful write, you touched my heart. That;'s a real imagination, you starting was so good n ending was damn nice as well.
how did you get the idea to write if may i ask ?

[Chrys_Pap]

Thank you very much! :) It is a poem i first wrote in my mother tongue and then i translated it in English. Do you mean the idea to write this poem or in general? This poem came out of how i felt that day and i wanted to express it in paper. But generally i think writing is in me...I can not resist playing with words and putting them in such an order that they present a better world and a more beautiful one.

[Trigorin]

Not bad, and your use of imagery, especially at the very end, is fairly well-done. I wish you'd expanded this a little bit more, as it seems to me the ending is just a tad expected and passive, but either way, this is a good start.

[Chrys_Pap]

Thank you for reviewing! :) The end is indeed passive because i wanted to show the passivity that lies in expectation...just waiting for something to happen.