Soon

It something i wrote after a very long time....

Riding aglide through hails and storm

mission relentless and far

sweeping across the endless void

I close my eyes and move along

Yet light like thunder vene

blistering my void,pieces to pieces

Though the dreamy shade cast high above

I burn and burn like cluttering leaves

soon bereft to sight and sense

I lie awake ,waiting for the day

Reviews

[Riddhi]

I liked it....actually i liked in this poem your use of words and that was very witful....You are a very talented writer pravarthy....
It was a short , simple and sweet poem...
i indeed enjoyed reading it...
Eager to read your next writing....
Keep on writing and thanks for sharing...
riddhi

[Parvathy Nandan]

thank you for such lovely reviews riddhi, it is really encouraging. du read my new writings in my blog.. mimblewimblwblog.wordpress.com

[Riddhi]

Ok..i will try to read them...

[tanmay7551]

Dark... This is the first world I could relate here. And while there is no end yet and story to unfold , description of puzzles and pain within mind works well.

[Parvathy Nandan]

thank you tanmay :)

[M P Ramesh]

Parvathy,
It is near
you will have to see it
that is all

catch it , hold it
reshape it
I hope you know how to" MAKE CHAPATHIS"
Kitchen is best palce to start creative writing, even if writers avoid this palce


carry on pl....


M P Ramesh

[Chirag Kumar]

Excellent imagery and good flow. Loved it!

[Parvathy Nandan]

thank you Chirag :)

[Solar]

A beautiful piece of writing - I need help with understanding this [the word vene]

light like thunder vene
blistering my void

The sense of movement and imagery ignites this poem like a bolt of lightning.