Ending

Ending

You held me captive

a slave to your every wish

why unbind me now?

26/07/12

Reviews

[Andorianskye]

stirs the soal

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Xleana

[Kajal Gulabani]

Real suffering ! Takes you to superlative degree of pain.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Kajal

[spiritwind]

Even though she has you a slave to fulfilling her every wish, it gets boring~~lacks the challenge of the hunt, lacks the mystery of whether or not the hunt will end in success, lacks the ecstasy of winning over impossible odds... in other words, heck if I know

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks SW let's see where it goes.

[quinfinn]

i never got the wherefore and the why....like you, i am tormented. very good write!

[Frieda P]

For the life of me I'd not have an answer to that one with your charming personality, boyish charm and the talent to blow someone's skirt up! Or is this about writer's block? ;-) Nice read.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Not writers block my darling!

[Frieda P]

Funny how you fluffed over all that other stuff! ;-P

[Leslie Philibert]

why indeed ? Good poem.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The central question I never got an answer to lol Thanks Leslie.

[LA Lorena]

nice senryu John, an a mini-poetry lesson thrown in with the reviews too! Bonus!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes but I forgot to reference it lol

[DIVYA]

I sense despair here. And like you would have nowhere to go...Unfair but thats how it ends....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Divya, that is how it felt. Hope you are enjoying your day.

[DIVYA]

Trying to :) I hope you are!

[Aly]

Short and to the point.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A senryu my dear!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A senyru my dear!

[X]

Ah- I kept thinking these were haikus. Difference?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Senryū tend to be about human foibles while haiku tend to be about nature, and senryū are often cynical or darkly humorous while haiku are more serious. Unlike haiku, senryū do not include a kireji (cutting word), and do not generally include a kigo, or season word.

[X]

Cool

[X]

Thanks for the info