Ticking Clocks

Ticking Clocks

I love the sound

of ticking clocks.

An echo of time

as it slips wet

and silently

through my grasp.

As you slip carelessly

through my mind,

screeching at my memories

like a banshee,

tearing through hardened arteries,

ripping my soul to discarded shreds.

The passage of moments

will though soften

these vicious hurts,

the clocks may stop

but time will not.

 

29/09/12

Reviews

[Mia]

"tearing through hardened arteries,
ripping my soul to discarded shreds."
Whoa! I felt that.
You managed to draw out so much emotion with your words. It’s an incredible thing!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Mia. Hope you are well.

[Mia]

You too!

[Bewitching Sensations]

As always a great poem.. well done...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Ruth.

[Bewitching Sensations]

thats ok :)

[mandy]

time does heal...love the style

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Mandy

[Cerise]

Wooow..it has depth..wonderfully written from start to end..well done

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you!

[Nicky Sarti]

A poem for many levels me thinks!
You can be forgiven for thinking that this could be taken many different ways.
Either way, it is cool. (as always)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Nicki, thanks but stop looking for double meaning in everything!

[Nicky Sarti]

Sometimes it is more the case that I may see something differently to the way you meant it... I don't think ALL you write is about sex/lust ~ just like I don't either!

[Pratik]

A nice take on time... there can never be a bitter irony than to hold a ticking clock in your time; because we are trying to hold onto something that is slipping away already! Time plays different roles in our lives and yes no matter how tricky it gets it softens our wounds beyond a point. The ending gracefully sums up the theme the poem revolves around. Nice work John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Aaran for such a considered review.

[Mark]

Wow, it is times like that when a ticking clock might actually be welcomed. A great write about something personal. I can't say I enjoyed reading it, but I certainly can relate.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Mark, Sorry if it dredges up memories for you. Thanks for a lovely revie though.