October Sun

October Sun

It’s hard to believe

the sun was out today,

and I could use its cosmic power

to paint my skin again.

I thought I’d seen the last

as September slipped away

but today it returned

warm and giving,

stroking erotic gentle

peace over naked welcomes,

offering the promise

of deep bronzed flesh;

and I could not resist.

 

07/10/12

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

such good metaphores, nice work

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Sheema

[Audrey Howitt]

Such a peaceful and gentle write--accepting of what the sun offered?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

That is what it felt like catching the last rays. Thank you Audrey.

[Leigh]

the Sun took us all by surprise - Nice Autumnal write -

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you leigh, think I have seen the last for 2012!

[Mark]

An October tan, whoda thunk? :) Nice poem John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Me neither but when it is warm enought I'm out there!!! Cheers!

[Leslie Philibert]

Good work again. like the way John sets out his work.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Leslie.

[Heather]

only you could take "I laid out today to get a tan" and turn it into a poetic piece. Nice!!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha, ha, ha, thank you Heather!!

[Nicky Sarti]

Looking forward to seeing your tans lines Mister!!!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Oh ok

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I don't think so

[Nicky Sarti]

(I won't look, I promise!)

[Mia]

One question...why are you indoors writing this? The day is slipping away! This is lovely John...it's raining here :( you words make me crave sunshine more than usual!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Because todays promise of sun never came to pass and I was in a writing mood. Now caughtb up on jobs but my pet hate still to do; ironing!

[Dr Jude]

Oh for a fortnight in proper sunshine... Barbados would be lovely... Crane beach.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Never been there it sounds exotic!

[Dr Jude]

I think it could be the most romantic, beautiful place on earth.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

When I close my eyes my garden is.