Reflections on Life Lost

Reflections on Life Lost

I have entered many dark places

where I have fallen

into the gaping void.

A space cold and unforgiving,

staring blankly at my face.

Mirrors with no eyes,

bodies with hollow hearts

and vacant souls.

There I have lain

at the bottom of the empty grave,

naked and afraid

calling out your name,

begging your forgiveness.

I am nailed to this cross

by your fearful rusting revenge

forever the walking dead.

 

06/04/13

Reviews

[Leigh]

A chilling journey into a living awareness of death, like a limbo land. I like mirrors with no eyes but am trying to get 'your fearful rusting revenge to completely fit in.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Leigh. Many thanks. I had the images of rusted nails through hands, nailed to a cross.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the transgressions must be great when someone begs forgiveness and is denied.

Revenge is so dark...perhaps it is forgiving self spoken of here..but it doesn't happen and this speaker loses all feeling...and is zombie like..a walking dead.

jacob

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes we seem to agree on this. I don't know the aetiology of this piece. Perhaps me again railing against my Catholic faith, or my feelings about my upbringing or past relationships. Even I know not. Thanks Jacob

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

One that generates thoughts in all directions, an excellent piece!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Glad it stimulated thought; thanks Thomas.

[Junert]

Nice, it is.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Junert

[SHEEMA HUQ]

the line: mirrors with no eyes - is curious, made me stop and ponder, that perhaps this is an explantion of the paranormal or of paranoia itself, I can imagine being surrounded by self-reflective mocking looks of horror! Very good writing

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Macabre feeling to look into a mirror and it does not reflect you. Thank you Sheema

[Frieda P]

I had to read this one over, since you know where my head went immediately....another scathing write on that guilt which we both agree wholeheartedly on.

"fearful rusting revenge' so well said!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Frieda. Oh and just where did your head go?

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, assume it to be a look at religion with the use of cross at the end, so you smuggle in a literary sense a strong image in at the end that forces you to re read the first lines..

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes Leslie you hit the nail on the head. Catholicicm again and the inbred guilt it cultures! Thank you.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Love the unambiguous visual rich theme in this piece. Tranquility achieved with acceptance of truth. Love this brilliant piece Mr. John. Thanks for sharing.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Marc!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Welcome Mr. John :)

[quinfinn]

oh, i know this one too well for my own good. what are you doing, writing these morose themes? i though you had found the love of your life......anyway, you definitely struck a familiar chord with me here, deep and personal. nicely done, john.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ah! as I said, reflections my dear Quin.

[quinfinn]

yeh, i get that. excellent write, poet.