Faithless

Faithless

I dare not contemplate

this dream

for it has taken too many

changes of the moon

to reach my world.

Too many cycles of the sun

have passed and scorched my flesh

till my bones are arid dry.

For too long I have lived

in this abyss of sadness,

that deep and empty place

where hope has no light

and the energy of love

dare not evoke the demons

that guard hate so well.

 

07/04/13

Reviews

[Barbara Kasey Smith]

This leaves me with images of sadness and a desire to allow hate to swallow the writer to permit hate to remain.

[Vic]

Very well done! I enjoyed this poem a lot. I loved the flow, some of the words you choose, and it's clarity. The point is there and has an ending that made me not sad or angry, as one might think it would, but gave me a sense of longing to know what causes this pain. Excellent.

[pasdepoisson]

Well done! Very crisp and effective. "Arid dry" could be a tad redundant, though. Cheers!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks

[Luna Azul]

I loved this! Very emotional

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you LA

[Luna Azul]

No problem.

[Fréyjä Helv..]

Brilliant. Eloquent and beautiful. Definitely captured what one so hopeless would be.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks for your kindness PH

[Nicaushio Yamaki]

nice work

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks Nicaushio.

[Nicaushio Yamaki]

No problem.

[MandaBear]

Very great write! such a great talent

[John Alexander McFadyen]

That is so very kind Amanda, many thanks.

[modtoddinc]

Enjoyed your poem.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks Todd

[Emerald Seas]

Wow - now THAT is how you write. You've taken such a tragic feeling of despair and so eloquently encapsulated it within these words that one cannot help but love the poem, even when full of such despondency.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

QSS this is a very kind review. Many thanks.

[Tomi]

Words can't describe the sadness and brutal vigor of this yet so beautifully written poem. Splendid, Just splendid!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You are very kind Tomi. Many thanks