Faithless

Faithless

I dare not contemplate

this dream

for it has taken too many

changes of the moon

to reach my world.

Too many cycles of the sun

have passed and scorched my flesh

till my bones are arid dry.

For too long I have lived

in this abyss of sadness,

that deep and empty place

where hope has no light

and the energy of love

dare not evoke the demons

that guard hate so well.

 

07/04/13

Reviews

[Pete Langley]

Is this the basis of all religion? ....that our weakness as a species is that we can only remain pragmatic in acceptance of `what is` for so long and so far before we start wishing for more? The last two lines of the poem reveal the need to try to exorcise that part of `us` we regard as `sinful`. A very thought provoking poem, John. P.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Pete for such a considered review.

[Gerald Parker]

Maybe 'dares' not evoke the demons ...' I am wondering how Sartre managed and Voltaire. Pascal's interesting but he was a betting man.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Now you are giving me an education Gerald!

[Gerald Parker]

Pardonne-moi.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No education is good but just remember I learn slowly!

[Gerald Parker]

Excuse-moi?

[Geon Quuin]

No matter how deep you fall into the abyss, light will always shine upon you.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Unless you are a poet lol!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

even contemplating brings sadness---deep in the abyss this one...but well penned to get that feeling of hopelessness.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Jacob, thank you. I assure you this was simply a poem.

[Keith LaFountaine]

This speaks to me on a personal level, as I have experienced my fair share of pain. So much emotion is packed into this. If you have not done so, I would highly recommend that you publish a collection of your work. It would certainly sell!

The only thing I noticed was the coupling of the words "arid dry" seemed a little awkward to read. I don't know if that's just me, but perhaps another synonym would work? That's my two cents at least.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Not so happy you could relate to this for obvious reasons. I am sorry anyone has to experience such emotions. I guess sometimes it helps to get one to value what one has. I will look at 'arid dry' many thanks Keith

[Tate Morgan]

Life is rarely fair But it always seems to dish out pain.Have faith in yourself we your friends Do!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Tate tis but verse not my current state of mind I assure you. I just reached into the dark places I have been for a while. Thank you so much for your kindness though.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Guarded piece there - there is a sense of reality that is not coming through! well done!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Thomas

[quinfinn]

many changes of the moon indeed. you have penned my life herein. and these words, all this write resonates with me. the last two lines kick a*s!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Quin!

[quinfinn]

welcome.....

[Frieda P]

Now you're starting to sound like me John! This is such a dire reflection of the dark space that takes up residence in our soul sometimes. So brilliantly pen'd!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ah Ha! but I write as poetry not as life as it is for moi!

[DIVYA]

The first few lines are just wonderful, "too many changes of the moon" Wow!

Sometimes, we get used to hate, to sadness, to an extent that we forget what love was. And so even when it comes our way, we either don't understand it or are too afraid to feel it. We may feel we do not deserve it....

So incredibly said here....

"that deep and empty place
where hope has no light
and the energy of love
dare not evoke the demons
that guard hate so well

Beautiful poetry John! And I can't wait to read more!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Divya and you do understand so well.

[DIVYA]

You are welcome John!