Her Jailer

Her Jailer

The ravens of death

will come for you,

blackly pecking

your putrid flesh

and leaving your crumbling bones

to bleach in the sun

of your darkest sins.

No penance will save you,

you have to pay the price

for the devil’s work.

A work you relished

while you danced

as her spirit broke

and you trampled on her

crumpled heart.

Such evil deeds

will cast you now

to the darkest corners of the Earth

where you must hide your guilt

until Hades calls you

to your rightful place

in Satan’s stinking lair.

 

18/04/13

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

This reeks of domestic violence. Very vivid and disturbing. Great work, John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thankfully not physical violence.

[KAOlmsted]

Amen...but still...emotional abuse can be just as devastating. More so, sometimes. Somebody can look at a woman and see a bruise and get all puffed up with righteous indignation and rally for that woman's survival while the same person might look at a woman with bent posture and downcast eyes and think, "My god, woman, grow a spine." She only gets help if she asks for it and you know damn well she won't...Anyway. Good write. Thanks, John.

[Leigh]

You are ferocious and harsh with your subject matter, I got a feeling of dark foreboding reading this like I was locked in the Tower of London

[John Alexander McFadyen]

He should be locked away for the way he treated the woman he called his wife! Thanks Leigh

[Leigh]

As always it is my pleasure to read your work

[Deuces]

There is fierce, unforgiving power in these words. Condemning the adversary to a lifetime of darkness. Wow. Karma at its best... having to pay the price for the devil's work.

Awesome, strong piece of work.

[BlackRose]

WOW! Fantastic piece. No letting them A off the hook. Commanding in its own way. How one is and/or feel sometimes when they damaged/hurt. Reminds me my own I did called Cat Crazy. If you read it and/or my other works, let know if you like them with feedback. Thanks. Now I will read some of your others.

P

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks BR. Can't recall coming across your work. I stick to mainly read requests as they keep me constantly busy. I will take a peek now though.

[BlackRose]

Thanks and thanks for the reviews. And your very welcome. Anytime.

[PP]

This is such a commanding poem, much like the jury's declaration of a punishment of the highest degree. It is absolutely awesome with crisp words and mind piercing imagery! Bravo John !

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Prathama

[PP]

Pleasure is mine John!

[A. H. Pinley]

The darkest corners of the earth would be loneliness. Jail cell forever separated from society. Isolated. No one to hear your cries and feel your pain. This would be hell.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Aye they would be that. Thanks A H P

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Aye they would be that. Thanks A H P

[redflutterby]

Oh how I love dark poems!! Gave me goose bumps all over!! Lol...wonderful write!!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you dear lady. Most kind!

[s y e]

Flip flops! This was a DARK write! o.o wow, this was really, really powerful, so many lines that would just cut! I'd hate to be on your bad side, I have a feeling you have those evil eyes, the eyes that could kill just by looking..... O.O YIKES!

Good write, John!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

So be afraid my dear....be very afraid!
Oh and ta muchly lass!

[s y e]

Ta very mooch ;-P

Haha had to say that..... sorry

[John Alexander McFadyen]

hey that's Liverpudlian!

[s y e]

Ae well...... AWKWARD! LOL