Her Jailer

Her Jailer

The ravens of death

will come for you,

blackly pecking

your putrid flesh

and leaving your crumbling bones

to bleach in the sun

of your darkest sins.

No penance will save you,

you have to pay the price

for the devil’s work.

A work you relished

while you danced

as her spirit broke

and you trampled on her

crumpled heart.

Such evil deeds

will cast you now

to the darkest corners of the Earth

where you must hide your guilt

until Hades calls you

to your rightful place

in Satan’s stinking lair.

 

18/04/13

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

oh, I can imagine the speachmaker's long protuding fingers pointed, animated, seedy eyes, quite harrowing, this is such a good piece

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha, Ha Sheema I was pointing and frothing at the mouth as I wrote it. Many thanks!

[Leslie Philibert]

a work with a dark side, and the right punishment for a heart breaker..

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Leslie, years of subjugation and put downs and control are dark indeed.

[TheGreenestLeaf]

As with anything, it can be interpreted on many different levels by very different people. I think its sadistically sweet and personally made me feel better on this dreary night so thank you for sharing. Loved it.

[Robin]

Deep, dark, and a strong. I have no words for this one , John. Well, maybe this one, Bravo! I love how a man has to pay the ultimate price for breaking a women's heart. Well-written.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks Robin

[Mark]

I don't think I've ever read such a well written revulsion of someone. Controlled, yet full of the rejection felt for this person. '...to bleach in the sun of your darkest sins.' oxymoron? Have trouble with that image.

The ravens of death... Satan's stinking lair... wow, awesome!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Mark you are very kind.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Divine - pure divine! x

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks Thomas!

[Emerald Seas]

Wow, kinda a dark writing for you, John. I'm not even going to contemplate on the inspiration for this poem. Well written with a clear flow of thought.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes, hearing about years of abuse makes me DARK QSS! Thank you.

[quinfinn]

i get the distinct impression that you are eluding to men who mistreat the beauty and gentle essence which is woman...that being the case, i applaud this write with massive enthusiasm and think it is very cleverly written...and needs to be repeated to the point of redundancy. well done!!!!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Quin. Written about a specific guy but there are many out there.

[quinfinn]

yeh, b******s....good for you, mate!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Us romantics should stick together!

[quinfinn]

indubitably....no question.