Stolen Years

Stolen Years

I put you on a pedestal,

so high I could not reach you.

You stood there so proud,

bowing to your adoring fans,

leaving me in the wings of abandonment.

Everything I believed in was yours

so my faith withered and dried

like parched earth bound plants.

As I gulped and gasped

for the purity of your sweet air

you cut off the supply

and slowly I asphyxiated.

You strangled hope from me,

until I was no longer a man

simply a facsimile, a mere zombie,

walking with no true pulse,

no purpose,

no blood in my arteries.

Then you drew your dagger of deceit

and slit my throat,

leaving me to bleed

these decades of regret.

 

28/04/13

Reviews

[Corset]

Man do I feel this one too, we all have that one who made us love for the first time and taught us how this feels. This feels very Hemingway to me, how eloquently the venom flows, how raw and fresh the wound still feels in this...experiences like this , well they shape our relations with all others, as they always sit in the back of our minds.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Well thank you Corset. My son is on the site and he has already been compared to Hemmingway. He qualifies I doubt I do.

[Corset]

yw, :)

[Frieda P]

Oh my, you literally slayed me this one John....I'm bleeding all over your page right now. Can you retrieve the dagger please? Ouch, this one resonates from my toes, up!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wow that is a reaction! The dagger was not meant for you it is sixteen years too late my Lady!

[Frieda P]

I may not be the intended victim but I felt it nonetheless!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Why did you feel the victim my Lady of the night!

[Frieda P]

I've had my throat slit twice John....not a good feeling, lucky we don't bleed out completely.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Are you being metaphorical, I certainly hope so. I trump you my lady try four times!

[Frieda P]

And here I thought I was the insane one here, one came with signed documents, the other was my illusion that it was true love...you're freaking bobinz John!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Been there seen it; the 't'' shirt got eaten by moths! lol

[Frieda P]

Ha, you're lucky that's the only thing that was eaten alive ;-)

[Emerald Seas]

Wow, now that's a powerful and intense poem.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

It has taken sixteen years to put onto paper. Thank you QSS

[Emerald Seas]

Sixteen years?! Oh my...
Glad you have found your love now. I would guess the moments are that much sweeter due to your past experience. Enjoy today :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes definately so. Much sweeter!
You too have a lovely Sunday.

[SyberRose]

I usually don't like poems about blood and daggers but this was different...Lots of people can relate to this one...A perfect title too...well written John.
SyberRose

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you SR