Shadows of Silence

Shadows of Silence

In the shadow of your silence

I weep sad and quiet tears,

life’s blood,

dripping from my fractured heart,

broken by so many careless hands

that let it crash upon cold flint floors.

In the shadow of your silence

I see cloaked demons

lurking in the dark recesses of my mind,

waiting to steal my soul,

as long minutes turn to hours

and the hours bond to night.

In the shadow of your silence

my dreams are icy cold,

old nightmares come to haunt me

and the sleeping Earth draws

dark curtains across my eyes

till I am blind, naked and exposed.

 

28/05/13

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"in the shadow of your silence"
that may seem almost a simple line, but it is not..

that concept is powerful...silence does cast such a shadow on relationships...no words can be more powerful than a tirade..

and then there is silence...that causes dreams to become icy cold..

that part actually made me have one of those shivers...reading it.

this is dark, cold and intensely good in its imagery.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Jacob. I think silence in a relationship when done for ill is more destructive than a mighty row as it is less easy to deal with.

[NA]

Love the depth and emotion in this...superb read :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

What a concept you have flowing from your pen here...in the shadows of your silence--shadows indeed, as silence can be the darkest place of all when words are what you most need to feel whole and comforted. The imagery and flow here were spot on. Only suggestion would be to break the piece into two stanzas, the second beginning with the repetitious line "In the Shadow of your Silence". Just an opinion, but otherwise this is fantastic; a true pleasure to read and mull over.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Sarah for such a lovely and considered review.

[SyberRose]

I like dark poetry...I myself enjoy my solitude to write poetry and think...and now my husband is home all day after retiring...its hard to find...enjoyed John...Rose

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Rose. We all need a quiet place sometimes that is different from silence.

[SyberRose]

so true John.

[Deuces]

Wow. This was poetically bare and raw with emotion. I can relate to the effects that silence, distance or being ignored can have. Frustration. Definitely my favorite from you thus far. Great piece.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Cyntax

[redflutterby]

You have no idea how this affected me. Having been the one who endured another's silence repeatedly. Its one thing if the person is struggling with demons or has been hurt in some way. But totally another if the silence comes from with holding of attention to hurt you. By nature I'm a social person. To cut off communication is a stab to my very soul. Thank you for sharing this John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I am sorry you endured such abuse. Thanks AMS

[redflutterby]

Well we make our choices...and often endure what we don't have to by caging ourselves willingly. But life goes on..we live and learn. :-)

[Emerald Seas]

A profound writing, John. You captured the torment and sorrow without going overboard. Yet, the depth of feeling and heartache is palpable. So well done!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thank yous QSS

[Leslie Philibert]

What I like here especially is the last line, this rounds the poem up to a effective conclusion without being melodramatic, so another good one here

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks Leslie

[s y e]

Haha, someone wants attention! :P This was a good write, I loved the repetition, well done.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Sye.

[Frieda P]

Do you really need attention 24/7 John, you talk about moi! You know solitude is a good thing sometimes...just saying. ;-)

[Frieda P]

What's wrong with that woman of yours, doesn't she know you'll go bat shyte crazy?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No I will just write it out and when I see her tomorrow I will kiss her deeply.

[Frieda P]

Did you hear me roll my eyes?