The Picnic That Never Happened

The Picnic That Never Happened

I spread my cloth

upon the soft grass.

Laid out the feast

at your feet

for us to savour.

But you never came

and sat upon my tartan rug,

you walked away,

someone else’s favour.

 

14/06/13

Reviews

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Wow, amazing that you could connect a picnic to something emotional and deep.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Mehak

[V]

Remember, remember the Fifth of November,
The Gunpowder Treason and Plot,
I know of no reason
Why the Gunpowder Treason
Should ever be forgot.

[Zahra]

Short but expressing a lot, very nice.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you IHAV, thanks for reading.

[Kristin Lee]

Laced with bitterness but still sweet in its own way. Lost love, however it comes about, leaves room for new love to bloom. Very well written.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks for indulging me Kirstin.

[Keith LaFountaine]

So simple, yet so much emotion and depth to your poem. Great work John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Keith. So good to see you back!

[Leslie Philibert]

I really like this, here John employs a situation to transport an emotional message, the kind of poetry I enjoy the most !

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you for such kindness Leslie.

[icelandicblue]

Well that just simply sucks. Somehow being stood up against such a beautiful backdrop seems worse than being left waiting at some restaurant.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Never got ot organise the picnic. It was a metaphorical one lol with metaphorical champange! Many thanks.

[Emerald Seas]

Ouch - not cool. When I think of picnics I envision the checkerboard blanket, wine, sweet nibbles to feed a love, and an extra blanket (for privacy)... well, and the love actually there!
This is just a terribly sad situation.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha it is poetic licence I never gort to organise the picnic lol! Thanks QSS

[Frieda P]

Alright this is a not a fun picnic...I muchly like the other one better. Hope this is just for poetry's sake.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Poetry is a fun invention! Thanks Frieda

[NA]

This is quite sad...her loss eh...expressed really well :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha! thanks Raven