Ending Miracles

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Ending Miracles

The evening sun is perfect

for the bronzing of my bones

even though your deception

leaves bitter undertones.

For I have been there often

let down by female guile

and on each sad occasion

recovery takes a while.

But I surrender easily

and build up a thick skin

so I will regain hope

and seek again to win.

And when the music ends

and you stop and look around

you will never see again

the miracle you found.

 

08/08/13

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

I love the way the words fit together on the page, and offer a glimmer of hope.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Why thank you kind lady!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I was curious about the "bone bronzing" line especially, I enjoyed the scene which you have depicted.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Sheema. Bronzing bones refer to my love of the sun on my skin and the fact I could lay in the sun till I die.

[Keith LaFountaine]

As always John, you have excellent imagery here. Excellent flow as well. Nice work!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Keith

[Leslie Philibert]

John has produced some great lines here...love the second line ! good job.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Leslie, yet again.

[G.A. Collins]

I absolutely adore how judiciously you word things! You're use of imagery, like the "bronzing" of your bones simply brought the piece to another level. The rhyming was perfect and the rhythm was precise, it had a lovely flow to it, and you managed to keep the content interesting and meaningful all the same. This was truly a joy to read.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you GA for such a lovely and well considered review.

[DIVYA]

That's the spirit my friend and I am very happy with your indomitable spirit and winning attitude. Those who don't recognize miracles, deserve to lose them.

I wish you the very best always. Take good care John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Divya

[Archangel Gabriel]

Nicely penned John. Get more of that sun and Jack Daniels!

[Archangel Gabriel]

Never touch JD, don't like it! Thanks Gab

[Pryde Foltz]

Some great imagery, John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Pryde

[Mark]

"The evening sun is perfect

for the bronzing of my bones"

Gotta love that image.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wrote this on my deck in the sun!

[Meesh]

I like this alot. There are rhyming parts!! :) Great read.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I still don't do rhyming! Thanks Meesh