Speaking to the Clouds

Speaking to the Clouds

One cannot build love on promises

that have no time and place,

that have no identity

and cannot speak their hearts.

Love has a child-like face,

open and fresh and honest

as we rush to share in each delight,

catch our breaths at seeing one another’s souls

through lingering, longing eyes.

But the dance of glances,

of flitting lids and half hidden smiles,

must become a bold and romantic waltz,

so that hands alight upon solid flesh

and sweet breaths can mingle close,

as retinas lock in pure, unadulterated adoration.

Else we remain within ethereal skies

talking to the misty clouds that weave across the moons

in that opaque stillness of nights breast,

and there is no choice to make.

 

24/08/14

Author's Note

Reviews

[Ruth]

Have to grab love and life by the horns, let fear drip away and make a brave leap...as always, gorgeous weaving! xo

[John Alexander McFadyen]

True Poppy but when it bobs and weaves and avoids you it is more a bull fight. Many thank yous!

[AprilRN1210]

another lovely write.. this one speaks of wanting more.. more than just the timid, shy, innocent---it wants the bold, complete, everything that love has to offer.. it wants the comfort in the "knowing" that this is for real.. this is "the one"... this is what it appears to be and not some mirage in the clouds... well done..

[John Alexander McFadyen]

As always April you give everyone your fullest attention and you have read this as it was intended. Many thank yous.

[Kelly Scheppers]

"Else we remain within ethereal skies
talking to the misty clouds that weave across the moons
in that opaque stillness of nights breast..."

What a wonderous philosphical side you have, my dear! Ahh, but there is still eloquence here, languishing like a summer breeze wafting through a curtain..."Love has a child-like face."

...such beautiful lines, John!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Kelly so much.

[Lyn Anderson]

Another romantic piece, sad, and full of longing. The love that wants promises of certainty yet there is no certainty.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You nailed it 'M', thank you!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a very romantic piece...and yes, "love has a child like face"---best line...because children are just brutally honest...and they have no prejudice...they just live and love in their innocence.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you very much Jacob.

[Rene Salinas]

I got transported to a romantic scene, John Constable comes to mind. Looking at the night sky thinking and this is the kind of atmosphere that would give birth to this lines. Really nice metaphor for love like a child's face. Funny thinkg for me is the description of remaining on the thereal clouds. I would want to be there anyday misty clouds that weave across the moon ? Yep I so want to be there now. Opaque stillness of night breath? Well John if that place has no choice Ok but it is so appeaing to me.

Thankyou

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I guess Rene but this is about two people who are attracted and let one another know, however one is stuck behind mistrust and cannot, will not take the next step. Many thanks for such a considered review.

[Rene Salinas]

Wow way of the mark there .... Bury myself in shame

[Dee]

Wonderful work ...I love the title John and I love your choice words,
Love has a child-like face,
open and fresh and honest......how gorgeous is that..

Bravo...Dee

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Dee.

[R Smith]

Your keeping the romantic mood going very well John, this certainly seems to be your passion and you express it perfectly.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Richard.

[Frieda P]

Charming John, sometimes there is safety on a cloud, up close and personal is you know, intimate and certainly personal, takes a leap of faith...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I know my Lady, I know. But when there is a said bargain then two are involved and maybe one should never offer what one has no intent or ability to deliver. It only causes hurt.

[Frieda P]

Yes, I know, intent doesn't' seem to hold up these days John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

But unless matters are two way in nature they do not begin.............

[Frieda P]

Now you're talking a whole different ballgame dear....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Leave balls out of this my Lady!