Severed

The damage some leave behind........

Severed

You clung to my heart like a burr,

and when you had control,

flipped me over and practiced

your stiletto chiropractic witchcraft

on my spine.

Your heels dug deep into surrendered flesh

to puncture the lungs of trust.

You crushed my vertebrae

until all feeling was lost,

all sensation gone forever.

Then you walked away

seeking your next revenge,

leaving me paralysed

and unable to reach for love

from my turning bed.

 

30/08/14

Reviews

[Kelly Scheppers]

Being 5'11", I have no use for stiletto's...but I'm pretty sure I could leave you paralyzed in other ways!

; )

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha my last girlfriend was two inches taller than me in bare feet! Many thaks for the offer but it would be scary as I might end up in April's emergency room lol!

[Lyn Anderson]

This is harsh, and bitter, and so dark. John, John what has happened to romantic and undaunted?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

As I said it was a quiet Sunday and it was a passing emotion. I used to put such rants on my other page, Archangel Gabriel' but I have forgotten my log in details lol

[MomzillaNC]

This one is stark and angry… it's visceral.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha! just in that mood today but only in writing terms. Many thanks.

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[R Smith]

Excellent John, very dark and sensual in a painful way :) Hope I never meet her haha

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Richard. Oh there are many out there. They are like vampires in the night.................

[Woody]

poetry is like painting, right? each sees something different. so you'll padon me if I find this funny, even though she's left you for dead. I truly love this poem. pure delight, John.

p.s. I see you're a family of writers/poets! admirable.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Woody. I think you will find my son, James, is the real poet and writer. I am a mere pretender although I did inspire both my daughter and my youngest son to write. My mother inspired me though.

[Frieda P]

You get more brutal as your poetry evolves John, someone piss you off babe? :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Funnilly enough no one this time. This evolved from an interaction with Jacob and thinking back to your 'Killer Heels' lol!

[Frieda P]

Ha oh it figures! haha

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yeah but pleeeese just remember to take them off in bed!

[Frieda P]

I thought that was your favorite part lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No quite my favourite my Lady!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wicked poem...those heels digging into the heart...and those memories really stick...burrs are quite hard to pry off...so is paralysis once our heart has been broken and it just doesn't want to move its muscles anymore.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Jacob.

[Johnson Bobby]

Very nice poem made smile and think about
My first love and my new love now.



Johnsonbobby

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Johnson