To The Victors

Ravaged to surrender.

To The Victors

I don’t feel like dancing, not tonight,

for the moon is hidden by dark clouds

and the stars just won’t come out.

Inside myself I just feel drained

of all the hope that I have ever earned

in my optimistic coat.

A chill has settled in my chest,

turning my heart ice cold

with scepticisms b*****d child.

And I am weary of the fight

that I have often lost

only to rise again in battle.

So I wash the Asp of Jerusalem

from my pallor’s face

and offer my once swift sword

that you may plunge it deep

and end this pain.

 

23/09/14

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

Dark, dreary, and painful. The Asp of Jerusalem line is fantastic.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you 'M', I guess woad would have done just as well lol!

[MomzillaNC]

Compelling and convicting write. It's the condition of all who suffer torment: there just comes a time when you pray the tormentor will just end it, put you out of your misery… or that you'd find the strength to pull out of it or the will to end it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes I think you have it! Many thanks.

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[Frieda P]

Oh you and your swift sword John....you need to dance around the fire my sour friend. As always a poignant punch in your words, love the music too.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Sword my lady has many meanings including the ethereal and the sexual! I did go dancing despite my feelings and it was lovely. Many thanks as always!

[Frieda P]

Indeed it does John, indeed it does! Did you learn to tango yet, that's all I want to know. :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No starting with the eloquence of the waltz

[Frieda P]

It's no wonder you're so frustrated...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Tango in England is a canned drink that makes everything turn orange!

[Frieda P]

Me thinks you could use a little tangerine in your life babe! haha

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Maybe but currently only the sun provides the colour I seek!

[Frieda P]

Just protect your sword, it blisters easily lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Rubbish it tans nicely!

[Frieda P]

TMI ;)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

TMI?!!!!!!

[Frieda P]

The imagery hurt mine eyes....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Would I hurt you my Lady? Punish perhaps!

[Frieda P]

...and you wonder why. ha ha

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wonder why????????

[Frieda P]

Forget it John, you've been in the sun way too long.....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

PM me as I do NOT get it!

[Frieda P]

Just joking with you John, your funny bone is in dire need of repair dear.

[Lydia Shutter]

Never give up....never hand the sword to your enemy...even if the enemy is you. Skepticism and cynicism runs rampant in the world we live in. It is the wise person who searches for the ray of sunlight amidst the clouds. The fight can make us weary, but I believe the results are worth it. Powerful poetry here, John. Lydi**

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Lydi. In this piece I was offering my sword to the women who have broken my heart who I do not see as enemies; much as in your recent poem.

[Lydia Shutter]

Aha, now I understand!