Geology of the River of Love

Love unfulfilled.

Geology of the River of Love

My Lady, how I breathe for you.

Each inhalation a dream of your

naked skin.

Each olfactory sensation

a description of my desire.

Each taste a salty wish.

And now you melt like the

snows of winter

and disappear into flowing

rivers of regret where I,

silt in the waters, form

the oxbow lake

that changes the course

of time.

 

29/10/14

Author's Note

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

I like how you described the evolution of or the "geology" of the way love flows and how things are affected by each other deeply and sometimes beautifully.. each having its part separate but powering the other.. the way you "breathe" for her and exactly what each new one holds.. the way she fills your "being" and what the absence of reciprocation means.. the desires, dreams, and wishes teasing the senses and carrying moving imagery and a profound message.. this one is touching and well written as always.. love the music...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you April for such a considered review.

[Lyn Anderson]

Well done analogy. I like its figurative flow.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks 'M'

[Leslie Philibert]

Superb fusion of corporate and external images, excellently penned..

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Leslie.

[The Black Warrior]

Great choice of words, there is great imagery here.

My fav. lines

"My Lady, how I breathe for you.

a description of my desire.

Each taste a salty wish."

Now this line made me giggle a little..
"Each inhalation a dream of your

naked skin."

Thank you for sharing!

~Suk

[John Alexander McFadyen]

So glad it made you giggle Suk. Many thanks.

[The Black Warrior]

You are very welcom!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, this is so sad....so beautiful in the wording...i felt the pain of the unfulfilled love.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A delightful and sentimental piece well done