Life's Passing

Why?

Life's Passing

I have dug honest peat

from life's bog.

I have ploughed and tilled

this earth with careful, calloused hands,

and tended my flock

with the eye of an eagle

and the jaws of a wolf.

And yet here I stand,

alone,

upon barren land

where nothing grows

and no one cares.

 

07/04/15

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

Don't worry about old age.It doesn't last long!. We are all autumn leaves in life and we all die alone and don't worry everyone dies in the end. But yes you work so hard for your labours for your kin to leave the nest and with nature that's it. Life is sexually transmitted and that's it!!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You a cynic? never Andrew! Cheers mate. No worries!

[andrew mitchell]

lol only sounds like it when you get down to basics lol I watch the birds nest and toil for their labours and then the nest is empty

[sereenaoutloud]

WOW this is a sad write but also so very true, we all grow up and then go off and tend to our own families and then they grow and go off to tend to their family ..and so it continues...i guess we all end up alone with nothing left to tend too..or i guess we end up then being the ones needing tendered too !!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Exactly Sereena. Many thanks!

[Tom McRoberts]

Wow, such an ugly metaphor for life, but one that in the right (or wrong) mindset can ring so true. Usually the sentiment express in the poem's closing is done with such bitterness, I don't see that here, nor disillusionment; just sober reflection.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Tis about a parent's journey until their kids fly the nest. And yes sober reflection sums it well. Thanks Tom.

[Noting Society]

i really liked your poem thought it was amazing but i felt like you should have continued it. Idk, I just felt like it was kinda abrupt. Unless that's what you want and in that case it's perfect. I just would have like to hear more. Also, (just an idea) I think it would be cooler if you put an ellipse after the word stand. Just idea you dont need to have that. Anyways I rreally liked it well writen.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Jordann for reading me. I will consider your advice as none of us are so well rounded as to ignore thew views of our fellows.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

It was meant to convey the brevity of life.