Lasting Pain

It never ends.

Lasting Pain

With the energy of ice

you slipped away.

Leaving me cold and wet

and exposed to the elements.

You had done your deed

and left the blade

protruding from my back.

It is still there now

for if it is removed

I will surely bleed

to death.

 

14/06/15

Author's Note

Reviews

[R Smith]

could this be the cry from a victim of a false friend, the stab in the back of jealousy maybe, really good writing John :)

[sereenaoutloud]

wow this is powerful John, You can feel the pain , being stabbed in the back nothing worse my friend!!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No and getting into bed at night with that knife in my back is quite an art lol! Thank you Sereena.

[sereenaoutloud]

lol, oh i bet you need to invest in a donut cushion!! :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Cheeky!!!!

[sereenaoutloud]

:)........

[andrew mitchell]

Truly stabbed in the back my friend The knife is the reminder for life. Only you can feel it!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

It? there were six at last count! lol. Cheers my sharp witted Antipodean!

[AaronFreitas]

Nothing worse than being stabbed in the back... worst feeling ever!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed try it four times Aaron. I have mug printed on my forehead lol.

[wordman]

stab me slow" watch me bleed : is it my pain that you need

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed. Thanks WM.

[Willard Wells]

Sounds like stabbed in the back as love departs. Good imagery and I see the cold steel of the blade leaving it's scares. Good job.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed Willard that is what it was and has been. Many thanks.