Rejection

Wild and random thoughts!

Rejection

The shock of mustard

words on my palate

hits me hard.

 

Waves of burning heat

within my nasal chamber,

sear into my skull,

as I inhale your careless rebuke.

 

It takes my breath away

and momentarily,

brings stinging, onion tears

to my eyes.

 

There am I, ready to concoct

a feast fit for the finest queen

from each and every breath

you take.

 

One to satisfy all of your desires

and feed you with the fruits

from my well stocked orchard.

A smorgasbord of all the delicacy

this humble sous-chef can muster.

 

Yet you pour cold water

over me.

Blanche the warm glow

until I am deep frozen.

 

Bludgeon me with the

short hard, raised-metal face

of a steak tenderiser,

as though I was too thick

for you to consume,

inedible, ineligible and indigestible.

 

And so I must stand

naked and exposed

in my cold, empty kitchen,

wearing a soiled apron,

with only my own offal to stew.

 

A disillusioned and distraught man,

wronged and left to starve of love's

rich multi-layered desert,

as my soufflé collapses,

and my hopes and dreams

are dashed like crushed

eggshells.

 

 

24/01/17

Reviews

[Kelly Scheppers]

Your appetite for words and metaphors leave me famished. Such brilliant artistry!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you for such kindness dear Kelly. I do love cooking and am a bit of a foody in a low grade fashion.

[Tony Jordan]

Everyone is free to reject - equally the rejected are free to feel aggrieved and to channel that pain into fine metaphorical pieces of art thus creating a positive from a negative in time honoured tradition.
Well penned John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Tony. Glad to say I draw on historical feelings long evaporated and the experiences of others.

[Valentine]

Nothing hurts more than rejection by someone you wanted to impress. Valentine

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks

[DIVYA]

Raw emtions are so palpable, we can sense, feel and even taste them. Rejection evokes the most physical and unpalatable of responses. The message in tbis poem is wrapped so beautifully in culinary images. I could feels the effects....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Divya but so sorry you feel the effects!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the food imagery used in your metaphor here...

we get that sting...and yet after leaving this relationship, the speaker's love sinuses have to be cleared.

j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

salt water in those sinuses works Jacob, and thanks; bon appetite!