Deathbed

Life is so very short!

Deathbed

The bitter taste

of regret

coats my dry,

furred tongue

as it sits

in an inert lump

in my silent jaw.

My hollow eyes

simply stare

at blank walls

as I slip in wordless

wheezes,

from this earthly place.

I plead with my departing soul

that you do not consider

that I am the sum of my transgressions.

I am more.

For I have striven to be more,

and yet here I am,

merely a fool

with little wisdom

and a bucket full of

tears. 

27/01/17

Reviews

[Najam Us Saher]

You have very well expressed the true feelings one feels. I liked it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thank yous Najam.

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.

[Great Aunt Astri]

YOur short poem is full of pathos. I think many of us can identify with 'merely a fool, with little wisdom and a bucket full of tears,' Well written.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thank for your kind review.

[Tony Jordan]

Calling all things to mind - the final analysis - is one we can't truly get a proper perspective of, for though it is the summation of the live we ourselves lived, we are too close to judge it fairly !! I feel...
A bucket list would be preferable to a bucket of tears.

TJ

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh the hope of not ending it like this...to not be filled with so many regrets that we have no smiles at the final breath...

j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed Jacob. Unfortunately many, especially us Catholics feel themselves to be in a similar position. Many thanks for reading.

[DIVYA]

This is the story of my life. Of every human life on earth. We come ignorant and depart blundering fools with a long list of things we should have done and a longer one of what we should not have.

You sketched a masterpiece with such profound words John. Made me catch my breath.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Twas your recent piece and Leslie's piece which sparked this reflection dear Divya. Many thank yous and hugs.

[DIVYA]

Its wonderful to share such inspiration John. You are welcome always. Thanks and hugs.

[Einstein Noodle]

sobering ...love it! clear, precise expression on a subject too little spoken of .. great stuff in this and actually ..in its brutal honesty i find a measure of peace and comfort in your closing ..well done says i!
E.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Einstein!