Our Time

Three linked senyru

Journey

We cannot remain,

we are only passing through

on this onward cruise.

 

15/05/19

 

Looking Back

In the space between

now and then, lies the bleached bones

of what could have been.

 

15/05/19

 

Looking Forward

There is a black hole,

a gaping uncertainty

as to our future.

 

15/05/19

Author's Note

Reviews

[Siddhartha Chatterjee]

I find this quite powerful and poetic. I like the presentation - a short snappy way of reminding oneself of the whole magnanimity of the universe and the "ineffable plan". That's the way it came across to me. Loved this.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Three linked senyru. Many thank yous again.

[NotUsinganymore]

Very nice poem. At times we don't know what the future holds for us, but we can only regret the past.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed so Junglee. Many thanks. Thought you had left the cafe?

[NotUsinganymore]

I haven't. I'm more active now since it's summer. c:

[kentuck14]

John,
Nicely done. a well written triptych. I might disagree with some of your philosophy, but a well-turned piece.
T.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Tom, though not sure it represents my personal philosophy. I use the personal when writing but mixed with a large dolop of poetic license!

[Robert Trakofler]

I like this idea cool beans maybe that's why i'm not good at those things my ideas are always so hard to encapsulate into so few lines. I like the chain of thought flow from one to next clever clever clever

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ah but each to their own BB I find other forms hard like rhyming for example and the clever word play you excell at! Many thank yous.

[Chris Shaw]

Three well composed linked senryus about our journey through life and beyond. Brevity which can speak volumes.

Chris

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Chris. I like to experiment

[Chris Shaw]

Good to try different poetry forms. Nothing wrong with variety. .

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The spice of life or a spicy life lol!

[Chris Shaw]

You can keep your spicy life to yourself lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Sage advice indeed!

[Cherrie]

I like this three fold approach.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Glad you like it Cherrie, many thanks.

[Einstein Noodle]

its all relativity man! ;) i especially like the uncertainty of your "Looking Forward" ... gets me juices flowing ;)
E.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Trust you to say that! Whay you on man? Never mind so long as them juices are still flowing. Many thanks for reviewing 'E'.

[BlackPrince]

In such economical way with words, the three poems merged as one, in the Senyru form composed of only three lines per stanza, speak volumes and sum up human existence from birth, transitive existence, death and uncertainty in the next world.

Well done!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you BP. I enjoy many styles as they challenge in different ways.

[Kelly Scheppers]

I love the connection you made between them. You make it seem effortless!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Kelly. Hope all is good with you now.