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Sedoka

Why oh why oh why

do you insist on breaking

the true heart that breaks for you?

 

I do not insist

for your heart must stand alone,

mine belongs to another.

 

11/06/19

Author's Note

Reviews

[gram linski]

Is this Theresa May's resignation speech, lol, class,

[John Alexander McFadyen]

To think I wrote it for her would make me so proud. She simply had to go! Cheers gram (PS If you get an award is it a grammy?)

[gram linski]

According to youse English f***s I'm a grimey, make of that what you will,

[John Alexander McFadyen]

ENGLISH! Moi? Cheeky f****r!!!!

[gram linski]

Which political party rules your land, I voted to leave the UK, remain in Europe and keep the f*****g tories far afucking way, and yet, and yet ;

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Well I was right behind you most of the way bud. I voted to really leave Europe because it might force the case for Scottish independence. As for the Tories even my 'English/Belgian' wife in a lose moment said she wouls vote SNP!

[gram linski]

lol, travel anywhere in the world and you will find a scotsman in a kilt with a point of view,

[John Alexander McFadyen]

That is no point of view, tis the sharp end of my dirk Sir!

[Markus Anthony]

The answers dwell inside us, we just refuse to recognise them

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I think that is true Markus. Word of advice, never be a heart surgeon! Many thanks.

[kentuck14]

An unfortunate truth!!!! All too often the reality in a person's life.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Aye all too many times Tom, Many thank yous always.

[Cherrie]

I'm going to take this format out for a walk, I love this well crafted Sedoka.
The title and photo a great combo. It shouts read me. There are those willing to hang their heart on a hope, knowing the outcome in advance. Brave or foolish maybe both. But it's hard to resist that soul willing to love.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Cherrie. I agree there are those either brave or naive enough to do so.

[Einstein Noodle]

title hooked me, John! it has taken me 5 years to get haiku and senryu firmly established in me noodle .. now you throw the sedoka our way from time to time and so I plod along .. looking it up for another 5 years until I have that one down ;}
great job with it says i .. love the two perspectives .. and I can relate to being both ... the observation is so simple, real to life and has tons of emotional power whichever "speaker" readers relate to ..first read this morning for me .. a fine start to me day!
E.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Your graciousness is humbling dear 'E'. I like trying such mediums, Tanka are another and one that gives a little more scope than the haiku and senyru. Many thank yous and glad you enjoyed the first offering of the day.

[Einstein Noodle]

its pretty cool says i! :)

[Edie Blue Starfish]

Clever title and I love that poem. A heart doesn't stay broken forever. We move on.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed, thank you Edie. Was just a sample poem to demonstrate the forms involved. (Disclaimer: No animals, or hearts were broken during the writing of this poem)

[Edie Blue Starfish]

Happy to hear that!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we can only make so much of an advancement toward someone, but if there is no reciprocation, sooner or later our heart will find another...and perhaps that person will realize too late.
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ha indeed so Jacob. Many thanks.