Proposal

"QUICKIE" Original form created by Richard W. Jenkins © 19 Apr 1987

My life to date,

such cruel fate

as insincerity

doth so prevail,

to tell this tale

of dark uncertainty.

 

Now here I stand

with cap in hand

far from true contentment,

my life's a mess

I think it best

to avoid resentment.

 

And thus must I

at least but try

to straighten out my life,

so with you dear

the path is clear,

if you would be my wife.

 

13/10/20

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Very well done, John ✍

But, with your skill level (though, pleasantly surprised), I should have expected as much.
Composed in one of my original forms, I'm truly honored by your excellent effort, highlighted by spot-on rhymes, easy flow of syntax, vivid imagery, and in the stages of progression from downtrodden to humble confessor; then, onward in a show of sincerity and humility, by professing your honorable intent in a romanic, one-kneed proposal in an irresistible setting to the "one" who will make it all turn out perfectly … and, your poetic voice speaks the tale with true bardic poise. Love the "doth" bit of Shakespearean verbiage. : )
Your splendid taste in photo choice and music tie it all up into a lovely gift for your fans; plus, who doesn't cherish a happy ending … 'cause, after reciting this gorgeous poem to her, I'm sure she said, "Yes!"

A most brilliant first effort, My Friend … thank you sincerely for the honorable blessing! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No Richard it is you who must be thanked. Firstly for your kind review of my rather crude first attempt and second for sharing your techniques and encouraging us to grow as writers, many, many thanks.

[Susan 🦋]

:-) one of my favorite forms... I'm so liking te theme...but stumbling on a few words... are you open to suggestions?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Susan for reading. My first attempt and I will give it more attention next time. Suggestions welcome!