My Precious Rose

Written in the Short Rondel form (twelve line poem in two six-lines stanzas with the final line in each stanza a repetition of the first phrase in line one and following a required rhyme pattern).

 

My Precious Rose     Need I but say, you bring the sun To dreary days where there is none And leave pure joy to chase the rain In precious ways I can't explain For love is ours and here to stay, Need I but say. In whispered words of  "I love you,"  My heart rejoices that it's true. You warm my heart and fill my dreams. Forever's not too long, it seems; You are my rose in life's bouquet, Need I but say.     By Sharon Miller Bolander    © 2008 Peggy Paris (All rights reserved)

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Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Need I but say that this is a lovely homage and tribute to the one you love.

My only critique:

"Need I but say, you bring the sun
To dreary days where there was none ..."

The transition from present to past reads awkwardly ... bring the sun where there was none ... perhaps should be ring the sun where there is none or when there is none. Since the rest of the poem is in present tense, I think this change would make it perfect, need I say.

Other than that, beautiful!

Linda Marie Van Tassell

[Helena]

A treasure of a poem. So beautifully penned and visually lovely.

Helena

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Another beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing.



Need I but say, you bring the sun
To dreary days where there was none
And leave pure joy to chase the rain
In precious ways I can't explain



What a tribute to the one you love. Wish I had written this


Great Poem and the rhyming flowed so well.

[angelina neves]

So very beautiful!