Eden's War

You came upon your causality

Strange

With its surfeit and cradled Miasma

 Framed in this dismal lost cinema of blue

The regiment of clouds, reigned high

Skin warmed by your patience for slow suicide-

It takes lifetimes to heal

And in the end it kills us all

A wish, God-cocked

As we waded against his Eden,

Even trees were plumbed, so it seems, into trap doors

Absorbing, as they closed

All memory-

Night, like the deserted dog upon cannibal night in trinkets wore on

So, into the lie you lunged

Head strong through death’s screen and once through its taut wires

Millions of stars were formed from all that burned inside

of you

And again, a new child was born like kindle

That very same night.

Reviews

[Curly Grace]

Your imagery feels scorched and luminous at once...ruin turning itself into stars. The ending glows like a soul reborn from its own burning. Haunting and beautiful.

[Perdition]

Ah, yes, now this fair read deserves a clash of wine. Oh, for the waters ridiculous slow growl and rumble of returning, but not quite yet …all fangs in time ;)

[Priscilla Sayers]

This piece reminds me of a Phoenix.
Yet, in the form of mere humans we are in constant change, or lack there of, climbing with legs that have been growing towards demise. The ragged mountain of time leans into Us as we dig our nails in, clutching against serrated edges persistent to Live yet climbing further and further up, towards inevitable death.
Rising again to the circle.... Maybe a little wiser to live life fuller.

[Little Whisper]

I remember that night... it snowed beautiful, warming,cotton-ball snowflakes that night. Maybe a comforting blanket from him to you.