The life we lost

A short prose poem about love and loss.

Something died within me...

Guess it was the long walks through flowery fields,

Picnics by the river…

Romantic sunsets…

Nights at the beach…

Sessions of music and poetry…

Candle light dinners…

Taking you to the movies…

All the times I made you laugh…

All our kisses and hugging…

All the nights we made love…

Our never born children playing…

Our so happy home life…

Our so happy life…

All the things we could have done…

And never even tried…

 

All our crushed dreams…

 

All I wanted was your love…

But that’s way more than you could ever give me.

 

Our never born children curse us…

For the life we never gave them…

For the life we never lived…

For the life we lost.

Author's Note

Loss...

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

A heartfelt poem about loss, very powerful in that you speak of never born children…which opens up deep thinking about this… were they stillborn? Could you not get pregnant? Did they die in a tragic accident? All of these notions come to my mind…. Sadly….. and what ever happened is a horrendous loss, perhaps an incomplete family…..your words are emotional and it seems that you feel guilty you could not give them life as it should be, so in your mind you feel as if they curse you….
Excellent writing on a disturbing subject.
Warmly
B.

[The_Ancient_Rock]

Thank you so much B.
Wonderful review. I enjoy the way you consider things.
Blessed be!
👍

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome!
Warmly
B.

[NelliKong]

Wow just wow. You grabbed my attention at the first line of this poem. Love how you described everything. Keep up the good work

[The_Ancient_Rock]

Thank you Nelli...
I'm so glad you enjoyed this piece...
Yes... guess I felt inspired writing it...
Take care.
Once again, thank you for your review.

;)

[W. Barrett Munn]

Keep at it. Teach yourself by honestly comparing what you write to a greatness like Seamus Heaney or Wallace Stevens or Marianne Moore or Neruda.

W

[The_Ancient_Rock]

Thank you so much Winston...

I know a bit of Pablo Neruda... yes, he was very good.read moreThank you so much Winston...

I know a bit of Pablo Neruda... yes, he was very good.

The other ones... still need to read them.

Trully I never set myself so high...

I am a huge fan of Allan Poe...

Also like Shakespeare a lot...

But I also like to don't go by imitation and create something mine, and original.

But truth be said... we always learn a lot from others...

And it's natural to have influences.

Thank you so much for your review.

[willweb]

I have known this feeling in the past, far past but somehow that feeling does dissipate over the years and that I believe is a good thing. Nicely described, your poem expresses those feeling of loss perfectly

[The_Ancient_Rock]

Thank you. I was experiencing that feeling when I wrote it. Sometimes when we are in love... we can feel like that, when we lose it.

But time can move fast... And sometimes certain lost opportunities may bring room to new relations. Life is made of choices. One must never give up.

But I enjoyed writing this piece.

Thank you for the awesome review.

;)

[The_Ancient_Rock]

And some times things can even turn around and work out in the end... If one's lucky enough... of course.

[Chris Shaw]

Poignant reflections here of intimate and loving moments through the eyes of a romantic dreamer. All those possibilities, not to come to fruition.

All that was ever wanted, yet not to be.

Chris

[The_Ancient_Rock]

Thank you Chris...

I suppose there are times in our lives, we make choices.
read moreThank you Chris...

I suppose there are times in our lives, we make choices.

And we have to consider... all that some of our choices, make us lose.

All the things we just give up, or leave behind.

Sometimes, it's not so much what we do.

It's really, what we don't do.

Thank you so much for reading, and for your review.

I really like your reviews.

Be well!

;)

[The_Ancient_Rock]

The glitch again... lol

Can you pass through this one?

[Chris Shaw]

Ha, those glitches, getting used to them now. Have a good weekend now. All best wishes.

[The_Ancient_Rock]

Anyway... sometimes it's not what we do.

It's what we don't do.

[The_Ancient_Rock]

Thank you so much Chris.

Have a good weekend as well. Thank you for your kind words.