Downpour

The night fell again

once again

and in it I

I wasn't like I had been

 

Found us on concrete

creeping through dark

motionless streets

in slumbering town

 

Hushes while searching

a way to the light

one candle still burning

in troublesome house

 

Upon arrival

an infinite warmth

stargazers forever

a memory to mourn

 

Come morrow I sailed

through downpour this time

the path was different

and compass I lost

 

Others had helped

futile it was

for I have found it

when hope was lost

 

In house again

treasured embrace

raincatchers forever

a memory I mourn

 

It rained again

once again

and in the rain I knew

the same I'd never have been

Reviews

[devon]

This is beautiful. I love the wording, the rhythm, the cadence. This is incredibly well done! I really like the lines, "an infinite warmth/stargazers forever/a memory to mourn". Absolutely stunning use of language.

It's been a long, long time since I've read any of your writing, but I remember the doubtless talent exhibited in each piece before. This is indication that the talent is very much still there, and you consistently grow as a writer, poet, and human being.

Excellent piece!

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Thank you, Devon, for your beautiful words! I've been in a weird state of mind for the last couple of days (hence the poem), and your words literally made my day today. :)
It's been a really long time since I have visited this site. I wanted to close my account multiple times, but I just can't force myself to do it when I remember all the people I've met here and all the stories that they have shared through their writing. I can't really say I've returned for good, but I suppose the wind will carry me back from time to time!

[PoeticSorcery]

very powerful descriptions and word usage. it really brings me into the piece.

[Curtis.Lenker]

This is a really great piece. Beautifully written. I thank you for sharing.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Thank you for reading!