Hymn of the Forgotten

This one has been giving me troubles for the last couple of days.

We are the shades of a past forgotten,

Living with blades upon our necks,

Under the dominance of ethereal magic,

Drawn into schemes with knives in backs.

We are the whispers in the silent darkness,

Fighting for a way to raise our voice,

Suppressing the captivity of our minds,

Hoping for a glimpse of awaited rejoice.

We are the winds from a better world,

Trying to envelop others in gust,

Fully aware that refusing to unite,

Will only move nothing but dust.

We are the dreams of a future so bright,

Since living in reality can be so cruel,

Still we hold the world in our hands,

Because the world is rightfully ours to rule.

Author's Note

What do you think, who are "we"?

Reviews

[The White Wolf]

Holy bejesus, Tom, you wrote the perfect hymn for a revolution!!! This has some real strength behind it. I see a movement against those that oppress either with words or actions, for those who fight for the right to be themselves, not copies of everyone else. That's what I got from it, what you intended meaning was is your own, but I really enjoyed. Thankee.

cRISTIANS AND SATANISTS XD

Nice poem dude it was easy to read and enjoyable.
i'M SUCKING A COMMENTS LATELY,,,
:O)

[R.A. Youngblood]

Ova pjesma mi se jako sviđa! Mračna je i govori o ljudima,
Duboka je i ima "nice flow of words"! Istina je da mi tako živimo i da takvi jesmo, ovo je kao neka mračna strana čovječanstva, stvarno je preeemračno, ali čini se da ti ovakve pjesme stvarno idu od ruke! Dobro si se sjetio takvo moćnog naslova, kad sam naslov vidjela, nisam uopće mislila da se radi o čovječanstvu, svašta mi je drugo padalo napamet. Kraj pjesme je upotpunjuje i ono je outstanding. Ovo mi se pogotovo sviđa: "We are the whispers in the silent darkness,
Fighting for a way to raise our voice,
Suppressing the captivity of our minds,
Hoping for a glimpse of awaited rejoice."
Ta strofa mi je nekako najmoćnija!
Svaka čast! :**

[Khal Attero]

Magnifique!

[Brianna Van Zandt]

This is wonderful. Absolutely beautifully written. It flows very well, and there's truth in the way you wrote it. I liked it very much. :)

[Margarette]

We are the exact manifestation of your poem. This really holds so much truth that when it spread to humanity, it will incinerate our existence. Others may not accept the fact but still, this is a proof of our way of living. This is amazing indeed!

[VinoVenitas]

This was a good piece, solid writing. I love the title by the way, that just drew me in

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

We are, indeed the statment of all.

[Petar]

Omg sooo gooood