My Nightingale

The Dodoistu is a fixed folk song form of Japanese origin and is often about love or humour. It has 26 syllables made of four lines of 7, 7, 7, 5 syllables respectively.

My Nightingale

You are my soul’s Nightingale

Powerful and beautiful

Singing tunes atop heartstrings 

In rhythms of love

Copyright @ Phillozofee 2018

Author's Note

Dodoistu format; 7, 7, 7, 5 syllables ...

Reviews

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Beautiful- souls sing that can be heard above all by the one you love- what a wonderful thought- souls delight-🌹

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

“Singing tunes atop heartstrings”- such a delightful image and phrase. Perfect and intriguing form and cadence. Beautiful, musical and uplifting poem!

[H L Rose]

I love that form! I’ve been looking into some shorter forms, so I may try this one out.

I love your word choice. I think “Nightingale” and “heartstrings” are placed beautifully and it definitely reads like a song.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Your review is most welcome my friend :-)

[H L Rose]

😆 I’m glad

[...]

It's sound like lyric by David Lynch . Nightingale come to me and say to me there is a love for me. Nicely done your creations. Please keep singing.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

I see the connection; from Twin Peaks Soundtrack - I believe the 'Nightingale' was a vocal sung by Julee Cruise! Thanks for reviewing :-)

[...]

Yes it was and when I read it your short poem. It sounds me to very same. But your version is original as well. Well done.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for introducing me to a new form. Haven't heard of this one before, but I might try it soon. You have certainly captured some beautiful romantic thought in your 7/7/7/5 syllables. Delightful to read and your image quite stunning. Thank you.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Glad I could introduce you to a new format - Bless :-)

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome.

[sette]

very creative words, i like the nightingale as a the core of the poem, nicely written

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Thank you for your review :-)

[sette]

you are welcome

[jacob erin-cilberto]

can't be a better song nor feeling than what this expresses...
nicely done, Phill...always a joy to read you.
j.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Many thanks my friend ... :-)

[Einstein Noodle]

what a fine form...it's rhythm intrinsic to itself it seems .. your images are soothing and emotive ... lovely in romance says i! enjoyed reading for sure!
E.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Thank you for your kind review :-)

[Ardra]

soul’s Nightingale

Hmmmm :)
Sure seems special poem for your nightingale....
Short and sweet
I can never write in forms hehhe I hardly understand them...goes over my head...

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Thank you :-)