Her Lips are Sealed

She stands back as an observer, to those who only
observe her-
keeping her thoughts enough at bay,
for her heart to remain a stranger.

She's positioned herself between the two realms
of society and a working brain.
She thinks to herself
her secret thoughts-
shielding the absent mind and keeping her opinions safe.

Reviews

[Aarontastic]

This poem paints a picture of a reticent girl who feels like an outcast--that's what I saw in it. You did a good job of conveying the feeling of remote isolation and uneasiness with the way you wrote the poem unaffectedly, good job with that. Two lines kind of puzzled me though:

'She's positioned herself between the two realms
of society and a working brain'

That's harder for me to work out, but I interpreted it as meaning that she was standing on the fence between participating in society and thinking for herself, because there are fundamental differences between those two 'realms'. Whether I was way off or not, it's a good poem.

[Trigorin]

Not bad, but it's very descriptive, and there's not much to it beyond that. I feel like you could do much better with this piece if you expanded it more and turned it into more of a narrative instead of just this brief description.

[Tai Ryens]

What goes on in the mind of a recluse is mysterious, and should be kept that way. I just love the concept of this poem.

[Pi Cee]

Thank you for your reviews. I really appreciate them. =)