Your Pain Deepens

You try

                    and try,
                          

                  yet nothing comes.

You wait

            and wait,

                    the page still stares

I call your name,
              but straight ahead you look.

                      I wish for your life
      to still be filled with all of those

               happy things we both knew

     Everything falls,

                      and falls,

           and falls
                   

  Your life,      the world,
        thoughts themselves.
       It all ends up in an endless rant,
  on,

              and on,

                  and on

                          

               it goes.

Reviews

[Otsana]

I really like the way the poem is structured, it really seems as though it goes "on, and on and on" almost like a rant. Great job!

[Aristede Craig Jr]

lovely pain it will be fine