High School Poem #4 - Dinner & A Kiss

i found myself holding my breath,

dazed--at how new this could be,

this wonderful fumbling for words

admittance of eyes, listless

dinner & a kiss.

 

i confide to you

that i will hang by your every spit

make you my muse

hold you--to your promises

your stretched out hand

catching the scent of oils on your wrists,

i could scream just by the friction

oh how my body feels

 

tonight is suddenly a better world...

 

i find myself in mad mazes

fierce thoughts, of sunset skins,

of surreal sexual showers;

of how astounding it could be

in the glaze of your Scorpio eyes,

your noble iron-form

now that your tongue slides across my upper lip

 

i am pressurized,

a laugh that wants to be named

opened

so that the world can catch (the pattern)

of what it's like

to be written in a smile

to be conquered by a kiss

 

the world is sudden / better / tonight...

Reviews

[songstress]

This was a nice read. I like the way each stanza is fluid and not disjointed. Each sentence or rather a thought carries onto the next.

Moreover, I like how you use the imagery of sunsets and Iron to convey an emotion.

Yet, I think this could be better if you chose different words in certain parts. Like Spirit instead of spit, or gaze instead of glaze of scorpio eyes...

If sentences like these were adjusted the piece could become a little more fluid.

But, that is just a suggestion.

[Penny Ellen]

I love happy poetry. :)