The Glamour Of Gypsies

 

The Glamour of Gypsies

 

The glamour of Gypsies

With their wagons

Without a home

Is to believe they are happy

And know where they are

Going

An illusion for wandering

Hope

Still not certain if they are

Lost

Or ever stop searching,

 

Even as they circle

Nightly fires with song

And tambourines

The glamour of such sad

Beauty

Of roaming gypsies,

Is to make believe with

Love

The happiness of a tight, close

Family

 

And all I have are the embers

Of their evening’s ceremony…

The lonely manifesting

Wishes,

With its rising

Like fireflies to a new moon

My solitude yearning

To embrace that

Sort of unquestionable

Love.

That spell is true to

Have me overcome by its

Company

Sharing the evening with

Fireflies and embers…

 

Reviews

[sybaritism]

I�m not quite positive what the line breaks do for this poem. I�m a firm believer that line breaks do wonders for a poem. Try to avoid ending a poem with �...,� the line should be strong enough to make the same feeling �...�s do. The imagery in this poem is beautiful, though strengthen it. One of the things I have trouble with is conveying more ideas through concept words, �love,� �hope,� et cetera, and I�m seeing that in this poem too--the best part of poetry is the way one is able to live it. Use as much imagery as you can to represent what you�re trying to say. That way, the reader will feel they are living it. I find that it is much better to use active words, rather than helping verbs (like �are,� �be,� �been,�etc.), though that�s always difficult to do since we use helping verbs in everyday language.

I don�t mean to be down on the poem--I love the message in this. Very different kind of topic with a beautiful concept, but it could definitely be stronger.

[Shannon Carinne Sparks]

I disagree with sybaritism. I like the line breaks they seem to emphasize emotion; I also think that you did a good job hinting at delemas that are contrasted with the life of the gypsy. To have that kind of love is to always be on the outside of the circle, like the gypsies.