~Too Much To Dream~

this is not about drinking..its about dreaming and i just added a lil twist to it..

~Too Much to Dream~

I had too much to dream last night.
I woke up with this painful hangover
That split my head in two.

 

I consumed so much last night
That the toilet couldn’t hold it all in.
…I recall…
I took a strong shot of fantasy
And chased it with reality
Then I chugged a bottle of desire.

 

Later I sipped a little bit of delight
I took a drink of distasteful sorrow
And distained pain that set my chest on fire.
…I remember…
Thirsty temptation luring me to drink more
While persuasion handed me another ‘cold one’,
And pressure refilled my cup all night long.

 

I dreamed so much last night,
I woke up with my memory half-clothed
And my thoughts on all wrong.

 

My heads still splitting in two
…Yea…
I had way too much to Dream last night.
 

Reviews

[Lady Lazarus.]

fantastic word play and conations of drink and dreaming playing against one another is very interesting,unique and atleast from my experience very similar in how they affect me...sleep depravation makes people akin to drunkards so closer to reality than first appears!

[BlessedLove]

:D I loved this! great write! :)

[Kgosi]

nice....

[Jeff Bresee]

Well and dreams, dreams, I have so many dreams to take...and try to figure out through the daily hangover.

Very nice. Piercing!

[Tate Morgan]

Excellent idea to use a metaphor

[everwander]

Wow, the symbolism in this is amazing! This entire piece just flows so well together, I really enjoyed reading it a lot, the imagery is very powerful. Keep up the awesome work! :)

[Sean M. Addams]

i liked this a lot a very cool piece... the imagery in this was done well... overall a very creative and impressive piece..nice job on this..

[Jrizme]

This was on point! I loved the way you incorporated so much use of the senses while really the "food" being consumed wasn't actually food. Something about using the senses in poetry takes it to an entire differently level....It even it even better that I've dreamed too much on many occasions so I can definately relate to the overflow. GREAT WORK! I look forwarding to peepin' more of your art. Peace & Blessings! ~JR

[Steve Thompson]

F*****g Good, I really liked this piece a lot. Very Creative!!!
I consumed so much last night
That the toilet couldn't hold it all in.
�I recall�
I took a strong shot of fantasy
And chased it with reality
Then I chugged a bottle of desire....

[Drifter]

This is a rather interesting poem. I like how it seems like drinking, but isn't... very cool. One thing I noticed though and maybe I am incorrect, but where you say "thirsty temptation luring me to drink more..." shouldn't it be "lured"? Maybe I'm being overly nitpicky. Either way, I like it.