Bonfire

Bonfire

 

The red, orange, and yellow colors of the fire sway on top of the wood, on a mission to keep you warm. Marshmallows and wieners on sticks hang over the fire, which is secreting warm air to toast your marshmallows to a golden brown for your s’mores. The crunching of gram crackers and the screaming of playing children tells you that this is where you’re suppose to be. All lights are on in the city, so you feel like you’re watching a light show, or you’re staring at a large connect the dots board. Fireworks are shooting off into the dark sky, adding beautiful colors to it. The beautiful lights are booming loudly and echoing through the night. I lie on the soft grass, and listen to the echoing boom and stare in awe at the shining colors of the rainbow, exploding like an over-excited baby bird that just learned how to fly. I wish I could fly, soar with the birds, and be as brilliant as fireworks. I want to make a boom.  

Author's Note

Please enjoy. Reviews are appreciated!

Reviews

[Maddi Snowden]

I love the way this looks. It feels more like prose then a poem, but still I really find this amazing. The imagery is just phenomenal.

[PoetryPenPal]

Thank you for your feedback Maddi!

[prodicallife]

Dear Writer,

A great write. I appreciate you made us see the tiniest of the things or I must say thoughts which we usually skip with the bonfires.

Stay blessed
Prodical

[PoetryPenPal]

Thank you so much!

[Praveeta]

I love the descriptions dear friend. Well done.

[PoetryPenPal]

Thank you a bunch!

[Praveeta]

You are welcome :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Hey my little poetry pal.This is so very descriptive ,I felt like I was there .Great writing :)

[PoetryPenPal]

Thanks Vidya!

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Maddy]

This perfectly described sitting in front of a bonfire for me, though it was a little repetitive. Also, gram should be graham and suppose should be supposed (being grammar nazi-ish again :P). Great job!

[PoetryPenPal]

Thanks Grammar Nazi! ;-)

[Maddy]

Anytime :P

[PoetryPenPal]

...........:-)

[icelandicblue]

Hi Poetry PenPal,

This is really nice and it gives the reader a celebratory feeling. You have all the trappings to create a rich scene. I hope you don't mind but I'm a teacher and I have a small suggestion for you. See where you say beautiful lights and beautiful colors- show us the lights and the colors. For instance for fireworks you might say something like fountains of red and purple streak across the sky as we gasp in wonder and appreciation. It's just a suggestion but I am always telling my students to create an image in my mind...show me don't tell me. Your pieces are always delightful to read.

[PoetryPenPal]

Thank you for the suggestion. I will definitely find a great way to make a more vivid picture in your mind. Thank you very much again!