Staying true

Staying true to ourselves is never easy. Just a drabble on the subject, really...

 

 

We all flutter

Wavering in the winds

Of change

And temptation

 

We falter

 

Crosses to bear

Eased up burdens

From a heart that’s never strayed

Far from those little things

That make us unique

 

Faith

In whatever we choose to believe

Morals,

A compass of constant question

 

We all flutter

Wavering in the winds

Like fall leefs

Color schemes tricking our minds

 

We ponder

 

Is this right,

These answers we live by?

 

Yes or no

Never seemed easy

 

We falter

Darling, we do

Heavy lifting

Complications, hard choirs

 

Staying true to the heart

Even though it’s often torn in two

Reviews

[Bubo]

Making the right choices...........so hard, and we seem as humans to repeat the same mistakes
over, but we learn..........sometimes the hard way, one can only stay true to their heart to live and
love without regret.
Lovely piece..........really makes me think!

[Ashly Christen]

ooooh good job my dear i liked this piece
a piece that causes you to look inside
and around
...and i can hear the faint hymns in the background swirling ever so gently into the thick air, curling above the reaching towers and into the heavens above.
i love it
i always do
mwah!

[.mate.feed.kill.repeat.]

Well, firstly, either it's my computer or writerscafe itself, but there is a lot of CSS formatting still showing. Not that it really changes what you're saying with your poetry, but it does make it a bit jumbled and harder to read.

Setting that aside, we get into your real work. I enjoyed this piece. I think that in a way, it reminded me of the way that even though everyone's mind works differently, we do still make mistakes, but we should be able to move away from them. Your message was very clear throughout.

Another thing I'd like to mention is the conclusion. In this piece, it seemed a bit weak. It left a lot more to be said and instead of just wrapping this piece up right there, it kind of trailed off. Oppositely, the introduction was very strong and intriguing.