Angel Rays

When I was a child my mother would point out the angel rays

I'd stare out the window in the car and think about brighter days

I never thought about what caused them.

They seemed as boring as a shirt hem.

It wasn't until i grew up and knew heartache.

I realized it and something inside seemed to have fallen back into place.

I was standing outside and watched the sun rise.

It seemed that the darker the surrounding sky was the prettier the angel rays.

That's how life was to me, you had to go through bad days

To see the beauty in the good.

The worse it got, the better it'd be.

It didn't depend on mood.

That was the moment.

I realized the difference between happiness and joy.

Love and lust,

choice and chance,

All thanks to the angel rays

Reviews

[Sebastian Falzarano]

Beautifully written actually. I was a little caught off guard because I was expecting the rest of the poem to speak about angels in heaven. Religious context in a sense. But surprising the reader is also something that makes a good writer. I am glad you shared this poem, as I now have a new way to rethink my writing.
The poem also hides a message, which is something that the writer should be great at. The message should also be interpreted by readers in different ways as well.
Great job!

[dan]

I hope I'm thinking of the right thing that you call angel rays. The conversational style and slightly irregular rhyme scheme you employ in this one serves you well in the telling of your poetic tale. So far the things of yours that I have read leave me (and no doubt other readers) with a warm and comfortable feeling, which also serves you well. A nicely done piece! take care...dan

[emmajoy]

It's more than obvious that you see and feel so much.. plus, a very important PLUS, you're able to express yourself with gentleness and care, certainly in this instance. Not being an expert, can only feel when a writer means rather than manufactures an emotion or emotions; that the writer has felt moved and needs to share. But then, writing is for self, tis like magnifying one's thoughts and seeing them in space... tis a great feeling.

Brava, dear you.

[Raveness]

Thank you love

[h d e rushin]

Raveness sweetheart, I tell everyone the most important lesson in the writing of poetry.
And that is, you can't write poetry without reading it and certainly without being exposed
to it.
That said, when people review your work they are also reviewing your progression as a writer.
I know, it's unfair but that's what's expected. To see how this poem is different from your
poem "the world". So to pick this poem apart and cut and paste the things I like about it
is secondary to the things I think about you, the young person; the writer. Things are
changing about you as we speak. The things of comparison and observation that comprise
92.8 percent of modern poetry writing. What's left over is just heartache and recompense
which will work themselves out in the long run. But seeing a thing as simple as the sun-rays
and then comparing that simplicity to the human frailness(es) of happiness and joy, is the work
of person who is 'getting it'.

Which I love......dana

[Raveness]

Thank you so much Dana

[Francis Orion]

Very beautiful poem. "The worse it got, the better it would be" is an excellent representing the ups and downs of life. Even on your darkest day, you need to find that thing to believe in, just to help you make it to the next. I feel like your use of light really worked in the poem, talking about the darker the skies, the prettier the angel rays. I can honestly say I have been in those moments. There can be such beauty in darkness. I enjoyed this poem, thanks for sharing. You can tell this really meant a lot to you.

[Raveness]

Thank you for your kind words.

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful story in the poetry.
"I realized the difference between happiness and joy.
Love and lust,
choice and chance,
All thanks to the angel rays"
I agree with your above words. We look at our world with hopeful eyes. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[terry smith]

Awesome poem Raveness!! :)